Dawning Moon

DiyaSL

Good Job @nikappuhamy
The poem was so sweet and easy to understand. I like the way how you used the rhyming words in the poem. That's not easy at all. The last stanza was very sweet =) I do believe the night is such a beautiful time.
By the way, I wish you the best of luck for you to win the contest ...........

Nikita Ahujh

Nishi, the poem is beautiful, you have described the night in the fewest words possible. The essence of the poem is purely amazing. I wish you all the best for your future writings!
Regards, Nikita

AJ Sea

This was a very pretty poem. Good luck with the contest!

dee jordan

Moons are my weakness and you captured the feelings we have in awe of a splendid moon. I'd make one suggestion, change There to There's (for there is) to read a little smoother. Good job!

Lucas Barstow

There’s a nice idea behind this poem with the moon being there when you’re lonely, it’s sweet. The repetition of some words gave those lines more impact and it was good how you tried to get rhymes in there too. I’d suggest leaning into one style more (repetition or rhyme) to set a clearer tone, whether you want impact or flow.

Poetshri

A good one! Keep on writing, and you'll improve as time passes. Good luck with the contest.

CM.N

The moon is mysterious in its own way and like you said, at night, alone, while looking at the moon, let the bad memories leave you. Lovely poem :)

G.P.Sharp

Lovely tone and melody.

shika

Simple lines but it took me on an emotional rollercoaster. I honestly loved how the poem started with a low tone and then ended with a high note. There is loneliness at night which can be overlooked if one can optimistically view the night as described in the last stanza. Nice one!

LE. Berry

I love moon thoughts! Nicely expressed nikappuhamy.

Archia

I like the positive touch at the end. The moon is so beautiful and there can be something so nice about seeing it in the sky. I think you really captured that beauty and effect of it.
I would suggest keeping one rhyming structure for the whole poem. There is some lovely rhymes but it's not consistent throughout the whole poem and it disrupts the flow of it.
Lovely poem. I always like to think that there's someone else looking at the moon and then it's not so lonely.

Ann Sepino

Lovely poem! I like the way it highlight's the moons ethereal qualities, like its slow ascent into the sky and its glow against the dark night. Good job! :)

FromBlackToViloet

Really great job here! I like how it has a dark edge, almost reminded me of alice in wonderland, like after the tea party is done in wonderland. Really good imagery using the moon and darkness describing the tone of voice. It's almost as if as like a nice lullaby to be lulled to sleep from nightmares. Mostly people see the moon and darkness as something sinister. But you turned it into as the moon as a comforting friend. Really nicely done!

Meaghan Kalena

I love the second stanza. Great imagery as well!

Thoughts Before Rem

I actually really enjoyed this one. It was simple in a lot of ways. You said you were learning and I can tell you have a bit of work to do (Though I am not one to talk since I don't write poetry and rarely read it.) But this was good with an easy-to-follow rhythm and a decent structure. I liked it. Thanks for writing bud.