Silent Reckoning

wintersoul14

Wow, so poetic! I loved it even it was not easy for me to read it because English is not my first language.

FromBlackToViloet

I really love the mystery you set here. The tone of voice you set with Walter really makes me feel like I'm in the 1930s. The way the dialogue is set up with the characters makes me feel like I was set back in time. I do find it curious how he dreams of Jeanie before he has even met her. Your imagery is really poetic when you set it up. I feel like walter has got like an obssession with Jeanie now as he now keeps dreaming up about and now knows about her. It could make him seem like he's absoutly crazy to other people. Like when he defended about Jeanie's defense, it could have a crazy edge to it. I did hate how hollywood and even to this day, they are so cruel to women actresses. See them more as a shiny object and not their full potential. I was thinking about Judy garland tragic end at the moment. You've really captured the mystery and the tension throughout the chapter. Kind of like who is really Jeanie, also Walter involvement, so great job!:) You're doing awesome!

Kristen Blakey

A set-up I wasn't sure I would like, but found myself reading to the end!

BillyBob781

The first paragraph is breathtaking!

Harriet Ifeanyi

your words are really explanatory, poetic, and literal

Damon Nomad

A beautifully crafted chapter, you paint a picture of the setting and the internal thoughts of this young girl.

Ann Sepino

The combination of your narrative voice and the setting reminds me of Black Beauty with a hint of John Dickson Carr. As always, I'm not that well-versed in Literary Fiction, but I do enjoy reading this type of text for leisure.

The lines that describe the protagonist's home are flawless. I'm looking forward to how her perspective changes after growing up. I'm also interested to see how the rest of the setting will be depicted in the coming scenes. Lovely first chapter!

Sylvie Mosaic

An eloquent display of words. I love how much detail is used to describe the scenery and the mother especially. It makes me sad. I will continue reading on to the ending; Curious to see how the story unfolds.

ZELDA VAXANDORF

Gorgeous Perfection! Magnificent! I truly ADORE your marvelous writing very much! Thank you. :-)

-With Lovely Regards, Zelda

Origins and Tall Tales

Awesome!

Sylvermyst

I truly enjoyed this first chapter. You certainly have a way with words. I felt as if I could feel your main character’s pain. I felt the tears brimming in my eyes feeling so sad for her and her mother.

Raven Akuma

Hiya! I finally have enough time to get back into reading, and this one was high on my list. And I must say, just one chapter in, I am already BLOWN AWAY. Your style of writing is so poetic and beautiful, it creates such an amazing image in my head! Seems like I'm not the only one to think so, lol. You're a great writer! :)

zilka.44

Must say, the adjectives used to describe things are amazing.