They Came And Went - Book One

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Science Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

Table of Contents

Episode 1 - Over

They Came and Went Book 1 Episode 1 “Over”   (Front pages of newspapers are seen against a black backdrop, describin... Read Chapter

Episode 2 - Questions And Answers

They Came And Went Book 1 Episode 2 “Questions And Answers”   (We see the inside of what looks like a mini gym/stadi... Read Chapter

Episode 3 - New Faces

They Came And Went Book 1 Episode 3 “New Faces”   (It’s still early in the morning. Derek and Timothy are seen con... Read Chapter

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Poetshri

I don't know what to say... But one thing for sure, I didn't get bored. I loved the James character. It was not fair that he was killed. The dialogue between the friends were hilarious. I was laughing. The aliens are creepy, reminding me of the movie Mars Attacks!!! Actually, this chapter is similar to any alien story. The story changes in the coming chapters. That will be interesting. Thank you for the invitation. :) I will read the other chapters.

Thu, November 25th, 2021 4:30pm

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Thank you! James was a cool character but it's important that when characters die, that the reader feels something. I'm glad that James made an impression despite his short run. Many characters die in the book so it was important to set the tone.

Sat, November 27th, 2021 5:25am

Thoughts Before Rem

I feel like it has a good idea. The dialogue was a but robotic and stiff and clunky but that can be fixed with a bit of work. I want to also say the government publicly kidnapping another race with no explanation even with risk.of angering a much more advanced alien race who seemed initially peaceful makes no sense but It seems like that might be part of a mystery the question of why they would do that which can make for a really compelling story when done correctly something that has alot of twists and turns.
Im.curious to see where this goes due to the idea and to see how the writing evolves.

Thu, November 25th, 2021 4:55pm

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Thank you!!! I will try to make the dialogue more natural in the future. It can be hard due to the screenplay-format and trying to have natural exposition, especially in the early episodes. I feel like the first few episodes of Game of Thrones had this issue because they were forced to introduce so much. Hopefully I can make it more natural as the series continues. I plan on there being 5 books with 24 episodes each. Thank you for the review! Would you be willing to give feedback on episode 2?

Thu, November 25th, 2021 4:52pm

Autumn Imara

Wow, this is a really intriguing story! It was a little hard for me to read because so many people died sadly, I wish Mason had still stayed alive, but it definitely looks like this story takes many different turns! I definitely am curious about how it will turn out!

Fri, November 26th, 2021 2:25pm

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Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked Mason. The reason I killed him, Anna, and Derek's friends was to set the tone that many people die. But I also wanted them to be developed and for a connection to be felt.

Sat, November 27th, 2021 5:26am

uduak

Hi,your first chapter[Episode 1] story is so interesting to read though it pains me when "ANNA" was shot dead and i like the way your first chapter is being written. i was imagining the story while i was reading lol,you deserve to be a script writer.hope derek will find his sister soon and they will succeed in eliminating all the aliens though the government are the cause of what is happening,and i'm not happy cause ;matthew,karl and james were shot. Going to read chapter 2 now .. :]

Sun, November 28th, 2021 5:33pm

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