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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

I thought it was high time I got back to the writers and poets I've befriended on Booksie.
For a bit of fun and to get a poem written, I've had a go at constructing a diamond poem.
The first line has one syllable, the second line two and then in sequence to a middle line of five syllables before pinching a syllable off each line back to a single one.



those who pry

prise, despise my

yearning poet's sigh.

I question why

they belie

this dry


Submitted: October 15, 2021

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xavier jarrell

I too feel it’s a cryptic, but leaves enough clues to get the message.

Fri, October 15th, 2021 4:16pm


Thank you xavier for personally commenting on my poem.

Sun, October 17th, 2021 7:21am


very good your construct far surpasses my writing skills, as I most chastised for, format of which I have no learning. example Octoberween, but I wanted it written like a text for effect of the spirit. thank you for your input I am useless without it and hope maybe you can teach me "suin"

Oh the sigh...

Fri, October 15th, 2021 5:15pm


Thank you datakon for all your thoughts surrounding my diamond poem and for becoming my fan. I'm not sure that I can teach you much about poetry as it is art that is so very different for each poet. Keep writing and don't be too hard on yourself - your work is not to impress us but to express your emotions. If your poem is real to you then it is a 'good' poem and you can be proud of making yourself a mirror to show you how you think and feel.

Sun, October 17th, 2021 7:26am

88 fingers

Very simple with deep feelings. I liked it.

Fri, October 15th, 2021 5:17pm


Thank you 88 fingers for kindly commenting on my poem.

Sun, October 17th, 2021 7:26am

88 fingers

Very simple with deep feelings. I liked it.

Fri, October 15th, 2021 5:17pm

LE. Berry

I felt this as a piece of descriptive which is telling of the hidden thoughts held by many poets. Well done. And as a former visual artist, nice diamond shape as well!

Fri, October 15th, 2021 7:44pm


Thank you LE for your kind and nicely thought out feedback.

Sun, October 17th, 2021 7:19am


Thank you for leaving a comment on my poem!

I've read through the poem, and I really like it. Though I've never attempted to write a poem with this structure before, it looks like a hard format to try and fit a poem into, but I think it runs really well.

Love it!

Sun, October 31st, 2021 9:24am


Thank you ThatGreenWriter for reading my poem and for your kind comments.

Tue, November 2nd, 2021 10:30am

5ilv3r 5trand

Interesting and creative.

Mon, November 1st, 2021 2:13pm


Thank you 5ilv3r 5trand for reading my poem and leaving you kind comment.

Tue, November 2nd, 2021 10:31am


very good thanks! I am sensing the "do what I feel like" from reading this. Very nice, love the format very
I like it very much

Sat, November 27th, 2021 5:09am


Thank you datakon for reading and commenting on my diamond poem. I really enjoy exploring set forms for poems - I think my favourite form is a ballad. This is simple verse meant to be sung or recited to a group or crowd and they need to understand the story, mood and message after one hearing!

Mon, November 29th, 2021 8:05am

Prism Persona

I hadn’t heard of the Diamond structure before. I like your execution! To me, it seems like those who pry do so only to judge and ignore the true motive and emotions of your work which often happens to poets :(. Whatever it means, it’s a very good poem. I’ll try this style, it looks like a good challenge!

Wed, December 1st, 2021 12:50pm


Thank you for your review Prism Persona. You have understood where I was going with 'Defiance'.
I hope you do try out this diamond shape - good luck and have fun!

Thu, January 6th, 2022 11:30am


Oh my god. You surpass my expectation. When you sent me a message about this poem, I was like, "Oohhh, what would it be this time?"

I applaud this poem. It holds an important message in there. From what I can "dissect" from this, is a poet's or writer's defiance towards people who only want to judge a piece of work just from its surface. And these people are quick to judge and disregard the true meaning and soul of the message. Hence, any poet or writer would feel disappointed that the actual message, poured out passionately and honestly, be dismissed.

Interestingly, the diamond structure goes in line with the poem's meaning. From the surface, a diamond is shiny and beautiful. But go deeper; you can see that it has atoms bonded together to create a structure. Much like a poem, it is just worded in a structure from the surface. Dive deeper, and you will see words intricately, deliberately pieced together to form a compelling, deep piece.

This is what I got. I might be wrong haha. But I did enjoy reading it over and over despite being a short poem. Indeed a diamond in a rough, this one.

Sat, March 5th, 2022 3:30pm


Dear Aleyson,
Thank you for your clever and thoughtful review.

Sun, March 6th, 2022 12:20am

Fayren Meric

I enjoy how concise this poem is, and the early drops of alliteration really enhance the feel of the rhyme scheme in the latter half. Exceptionally well written, absolutely 0 excess.

Sat, June 18th, 2022 3:35pm


Thank you Fayren for you kind words.

Sat, June 18th, 2022 3:11pm


Thank you for this Some people need to leave us alone, and not demand that we explain ourselves to them. I for one hate having to prove myself to any other person. Great diamond!

Mon, August 15th, 2022 11:25pm


Thank you for your enthusiasm in reviewing my poem.

Tue, August 16th, 2022 1:30am

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