life (Response to nikappuhamy's 'Life')

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Writers' Tree House

My response to nikappuhamy's 'Life'

Once Alive,
You’ll have an end.
Whether you thrive or meaning derive;
You must spend it before you are rend.

Life is a suggested journey,
Not a standstill.
Upon which travel you will,
To reach the predestined.

Life is a flat line,
Without highs nor lows
Through the eye of the grand design,
But all that we can see is lies.

Life is like riding a bicycle;
Effort without reward, an endless grind,
Superseded by cars and gliding planes,
Made mass by the sprout of stupid, slow selves of Mankind.

Life is much better off
Left alone, unnoticed and fading.
Let the pressure inside march
A parading and time a wasting.

Life is all we have.
Until the wrath comes,
The universal agent sauve and silent.
It, whom, strips happiness and misery alike, leaving nothing but…


Life Isn’t.


Submitted: October 30, 2021

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nikappuhamy

You know what, I was doomed when I got the email alert!! By the way, you see life in a different perspective and, I see it in a different perspective.. Sometimes our ideas match but sometimes they don't..
(I can't believe that you wrote a poem that fast.. For my one it took nearly one and half an hour to finish it)
Your poem is very beautiful.. I love it..
Keep writing Gen..

Sat, October 30th, 2021 3:33pm

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The poem wasn't meant to be beautiful, it was meant to highlight just how futile everything was.
I guess I failed somewhere along the way....

Sat, October 30th, 2021 11:59am

DiyaSL

Woah, completely different perspectives. Felt like a debate. *sweat; smile*
According to you, the life is somewhat futile. And by Nishi's the life can be happier from the way we respond to the present. My opinion is that both were true.............
You didn't fail. It's clear that the angle of life you see disparate than hers.

Anyhow, the ideas were well presented.

Sun, October 31st, 2021 5:05am

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