The Earth's End

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Hi! This poem is about (in my opinion) how the Earth will end, with a hidden message throughout the poem. This is a new structure I haven't used before, so I'd really appreciate any feedback.

It starts small,

A few flowers here and there,

They begin to droop,

Yet we don’t seem to Care.

 

Unsustainable,

We can’t continue this way,

But still more lose hope,

On their deathbeds they Lay.

 

Now it’s more than a few,

Petally leaves that take the hit,

The forest is gone,

We helped destroy It.

 

Smoke bellows high,

A warning to us,

We have to do something,

Take action, we Must.

 

But no of course not,

The plants are below,

Our high society,

The forest is still Aglow.

 

Now it picks off the animals,

Creatures big and small,

Swallowing plastic,

The single-use graves grow Tall

 

This great threat,

Makes many people reel,

‘These creatures deserve death’,

So still it kills each bird, rat and Eel.

 

 

 

Some take notice,

They protest and shout,

But the government ignores,

Believe people use it for Clout.

 

But now that it affects us,

That people have to spend money,

They want the bees to live,

So they don’t run out of Honey.

 

Selfish and greedy,

Unaware of the problem we’ve made,

They think we still have time,

But it’s too late for Aid.

 

We’ve destroyed this future,

For the next generation,

Are you proud of what we’ve left,

What’s become of our Nation?

 

Of course it’s not just us,

It’s a repetitive chain,

Of events destroying our planet,

With nothing for you to Gain.

 

So the fires rage,

Forests refusing to mend,

This is it for our planet,

This is Earth’s End.

 


Submitted: October 31, 2021

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Jonathan E. Lee

I actually considered doing something similar to this with my novel, making every drop cap letter at the start of each chapter spelling out something in Latin when combined. But I got lazy and decided against it, lol

I like formalist poetry, so I appreciate this one. Certainly something I could see being passionately read at a protest rally.

Sun, October 31st, 2021 4:28pm

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Thank you for reading it! I think I'd love to read a novel with this structure!

Tue, November 2nd, 2021 9:12am

JE Falcon aka JEF

I write rhyming poems, mostly, narrated and not, some Haiku now and then, Limericks on occasion, and poems in prose once in a great while. Your poem is structurally sound and has a great message, but from my viewpoint I see no reason for the diversion except for the additional challenge to you, the writer. And if that is what you are after, then go for it. --- I could be wrong, and have been before, but I doubt most readers will take the time to discover it's "CHANGE", or appreciate the work that went into making it happen.

Sun, October 31st, 2021 6:49pm

Author
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Thank you for your feedback.

At the moment I'm having Writer's Block so I just wanted to write a poem that was challenging, but also conveyed a message which I feel is very important. It was fun to write, but I can understand what you mean.

Thanks again,
Lily

Tue, November 2nd, 2021 9:14am

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