Gumdrop

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YUMMY GUMMY GUMS

Yummy yummy gum

 

Gummy gummy yum

 

Yummy gummy yummy gummy

 

Yummy gummy gum

 

 

 

 

A drop made from gelatin

 

A drop coloured with colouring

 

A drop covered with saccharin

 

Is yummy gummy gum

 

 

 

 

 

Gumdrop is yummy

 

Yum drop is gummy

 

 

 

 

 

I like to eat some

 

Yummy gummy gums


Submitted: November 08, 2021

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Poetshri

It was fun reading this. :) I remembered the Disney show - Gummy Bears. Yes, they're yummy. I loved the second stanza. It should be sung in nursery schools; kids will love it. A lovely piece written by you, Nishi. :) Keep it up!

Mon, November 8th, 2021 7:11am

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Will they love it? If I start a nursery in future, I'll ask them to read this then... Thank you, for your lovely words Shri!!
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Sun, November 7th, 2021 11:43pm

DiyaSL

So funny. It was fun to read. Believe or not, I read it more than three times. lol
Yeah, it's like a nursery rhyme. Nice work

Mon, November 8th, 2021 7:36am

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Thanks buddy.. Glad you like this!

Sun, November 7th, 2021 11:44pm

Genzu4750

Despite everyone being overly positive in their comments, I will be critical.
The rhyming is decent, but overused with the words 'yum', 'gum', 'yummy' and 'gummy'. You could have opted to use another word, such as 'tummy'. In any case, if you are struggling to find words to rhyme, then I suggest that you use a website such as https://www.rhymezone.com/

But I suppose that children would find this poem funny to recite
###and as I'm not the intended audience, I think that I'll leave before I say something drastic###

Mon, November 8th, 2021 5:23pm

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Haha, thank you for the comment Gen. I didn't think about tummy. That one really suits here. Thanks for the suggestion!

Mon, November 8th, 2021 4:54pm

Excly

this was very cute

Wed, November 10th, 2021 3:03am

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Thank you!!

Tue, November 9th, 2021 11:42pm

Thoughts Before Rem

I could only laugh at this. It reminded me of one of those old disney movies. Ir maybe hot crossed buns from elementary school. It was really fun

Fri, November 26th, 2021 11:08pm

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Thank you!! Glad you like this!

Fri, November 26th, 2021 6:13pm

Eraser

Yummy gummy!

Mon, January 3rd, 2022 2:48am

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Thank u..

Mon, January 3rd, 2022 6:09pm

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