Pure Wonderland

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It's okay to say we're all a bit mad as we journey ourselves into growing up. This is a short poetic poem story I wrote. Something I feel you guys might be available to relate.

I felt in a writing mood, just letting my words full of similes fall from my grasp like droplets of rain pouring down from my thoughtful cloud:

When I was a little girl, I used to pretend living in a majestic castle, and imagine my storybook castle being tall as a fire breathing dragon. Of course, as I grew into a teenager, my fantasy castle started to turn into a tilted hour-glass. My whole view of the world shifted into the reality of fighting the clock for my childhood ticking away.

I grew more into myself, but still trapped in my own tower, yet wanting to explore what’s beyond those castle walls. Every teenager has their own inner Alice in Wonderland adventure. For instance, finding themselves rushing like the White Rabbit, thinking they will be late by not experiencing grown-up things faster. Secondly, let’s not forget we’re a little mad as the Hatter, since our emotions could change as quickly as a kettle whistling. Lastly, the colorful caterpillar is getting high as his pipe, and bursting with many colors of your life transforming in a drunken haze.

Alice was a lost child as she fell down the rabbit hole. Everyone gets lost, even adults get lost by finding themselves. We sort of forget that we leave our own childhoods behind like a rabbit hole. We may try to dig it up, but sometimes we forget where it’s buried to begin with. Sometimes, we get ourselves excited by finding the treasures from our childhood, and being lost in reminiscing from your own untouchable Neverland. As I grew into an adult, I realized something that’s still a part of me, which is my pure imagination like Willy Wonka himself!

Submitted: November 25, 2021

Flash Fiction imagination growing-up finding-yourself adulting teenaged-angst

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Thoughts Before Rem

Hmmmm, this feels more like an essay than a story lol but I like the theme behind it. The reality of having to grow up and what we tend to forget as the clutter that is adult life starts to crowd our minds. We forget how to enjoy our time like we did when we were children. Good piece here truly.

Fri, November 26th, 2021 11:05pm

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Aw thank you. I see what you meant about the essay bit. But I thought maybe more of a flash fiction like it wasn’t quite a short story but wasn’t quite an essay either. I almost think I might start posting diary entry format. I am glad you enjoyed this, I wrote this when I was cleaning my room and getting ready for another semester at college. I guess you could say I was feeling a bit sentimental lol. Like you said, as an adult now, I kind of forget to enjoy myself and hanging out with my friends made me realize I missed my childhood. In high school, it was so much easier to hang out with my friends, but now work, college, life kind of makes it harder. However as an adult they say it gets easier. I’m like nope, it’s much harder lol

Wed, December 1st, 2021 11:28am

Ann Sepino

I love the animated Alice In Wonderland! It's such a colorful movie. I love your analogies between the characters and real life situations too. I'm guessing the Queen of Hearts can be equated to a domineering or hot-headed boss in this case. Great flash fiction!

Wed, December 1st, 2021 12:54pm

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Same Alice in wonderland is my fav. I even have a poster of my wall of Alice in wonderland. I think Tim Burton version is my absolute fav. Fairy tales, kids shows, can be relatable to adult life sometimes as we get older we finally see it. As for the queen of hearts, yes a boss is so relatable. So far the bosses I've had weren't too bad, but I'll wait and see. Funny enough, my college professors acted more like the queen of hearts. I could name like two professors at the top of my head I had. Who basically wanted my head chop off and soul my during finals lol. Thanks so much:}

Sun, December 12th, 2021 5:18pm

Greythereadaholic

This was an interesting exploration into growing up and how people rush to become adults but then miss their childhoods. I enjoyed the tie-in with Alice in Wonderland, and the figurative language you used was a great way to describe the emotions around growing up. My main critique would be, like another commentor said, this reads more like an essay than a story. Perhaps if there was more about the narrator's situation and why they're reflecting on Alice in Wonderland, this would feel more like a story. I also wanted to ask if the first sentence "I felt in a writing mood..." was part of the story or not because that isn't very clear. Overall, really enjoyed reading this.

Mon, May 9th, 2022 7:44pm