Dark Stars

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In a future age when men have scattered amongst the stars, and civilization has long begun to wither, the fate of the world seems sealed and inescapable. Can the course of destiny be altered? One man feels compelled to try.

(Cover art uses "Black cloak snip" by Ian Burt, licensed under CC-BY 2.0 https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by/2.0/)

Science Fiction scifi conlang space-opera ftl galactic-civilization

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A lone figure stood in the failing light of early evening, gazing out upon quiet ruins. Ancient ruins that had looke... Read Chapter

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A.K.Taylor

Hi Jonathan, this is a nice tight read for a starting story. Very few issues with it from my perspective. Just a small suggestion for posting to Booksie. I'd separate your paragraphs, especially if you do short chapters, so it doesn't look like a solid block of text so much. It helps draw the eye down through the story better.

I only noted one possible error or change you might want to consider. It's in the blue hued section(in line comment). You can remove it if necessary for aesthetics. I usually do so after I've corrected them if it's an actual grammatical error. Sometimes people leave positive remarks in these comments, those I keep as reinforcement reminders of camaraderie between fans.

Sat, January 29th, 2022 12:53am

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I'm still chewing over your paragraph indentation suggestion. I've actually gone out of my way with inline CSS stylings to indent my paragraphs on all my writings here. I do the same thing on my blog--and in fact there I even have some scripting to apply auto-hyphenation.

Obviously unindented blocks of text separated by a line of white space would be easy to do. I'm doing it now in this reply. And it is the standard convention online for historic technical reasons.

But personally when it comes to fiction, and other creative writing, I've come to enjoy a more literary look. And if that takes a little more effort to pull off, why not do it? I felt like it might set my work apart in an enjoyable way.

That being said, now I'm starting to wonder if it isn't a waste of effort. Has it gotten to the point that reading any text on a screen looks awkward this way? Seems like eBooks are commonly formatted with indented paragraphs, so why not other digital bodies of text?

Your feedback inspired me to make a few polls on several groups I'm in on FB. I'll definitely be giving this some thought.

Thanks again.