Killing the President: My life as a Serial Killer
Book by: Edmund
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KILLING the PRESIDENT is a dark, raw, and uncensored page-turner chronicling the growth of a psychopathic killer from his first shocking, childhood mutilation. Charlie, his best friend in grammar school, and Jamie Carver, the first girl he ever loved, snuff out the spring of Teddy's life just as sure as if they plunged a knife into his heart. An autobiographic diary of the evolution of Ted's psychopathic maturation, KILLING the PRESIDENT presents the chilling and often grisly insight into the murky recesses of a tormented and troubled mind. The last person anyone would suspect, Ted progresses through life as a model citizen, raises a family, and flourishes in business, political, and social circles. When his sordid past and considerable pernicious talents are discovered by a secret right-wing organization, Ted is blackmailed and presented with two choices: KILLING the PRESIDENT of the UNITED STATES, or be publicly exposed for the atrocities he has committed. Unwillingly, he agrees to the assassination.
Table of Contents
Foreword
Chapter One
Chapter Two
Chapter Three
Chapter Four
Chapter Five
Chapter Six
Chapter Seven
Chapter Eight
Chapter Nine
Chapter Ten
Chapter Eleven
Chapter Twelve
Chapter Thirteen
Chapter Fourteen
Chapter Fifteen
Chapter Sixteen
Chapter Seventeen
Chapter Eighteen
Chapter Ninteen
Chapter Twenty
Chapter Twenty-one
Chapter Twenty-two
Chapter Twenty-three
Chapter Twenty-four
Chapter Twenty-five
Chapter Twenty-six
Chapter Twenty-seven
Chapter Twenty-eight
Chapter Twenty-nine
Chapter Thirty
Recent Comments
Hi Edmund,
This first chapter flows better than the prologue. Your writing seems to be more relaxed in the first person and you've jumped smoothly into the main character's head and brought us into his world.
You do a nice job describing Ted's world and his friendship with Charlie. As a reader, I realized that nirvana wasn't going to last forever and the introduction of the third wheel in Johnny certainly seemed like the trigger. The scene where they were masturbating together was brilliant, throwing together betrayal as well as sexual overtones and discomfort, which seem to be triggers for serial killers. You've certainly primed me as a reader for what's coming and made me anticipate what will likely be a grisly outcome.
In terms of improvement, I am a bit curious as to why Ted is so furious. Most people would be a bit mad and hurt but they would stay that way for a day or two and then move on. What makes Ted different? He had a middle class upbringing. I think this is what fascinates the public about serial killers. Can you give us more insight into why Ted reacts so psychotically to this betrayal? Going a layer deeper into his feelings would help.
I think with every first chapter, the writer should tease the reader with some key question. That's what creates tension and makes the reader want to turn the page and learn the answer to the question. I'm reading this and wondering what is the event and the mental steps that lead this person over the edge into becoming a serial killer? You've started to tell us. Provide even more detail and you'll have a start that a reader won't be able to tear their eyes from.
I hope that helps. Please feel free to contact me with any additional questions.
Jake
Author
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Sorry Jake, that is not the chapter i wanted you to review however I take your suggestions openly.
Sun, July 10th, 2022 9:18pmFacebook Comments
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MrDunnePoetry
Interesting. You must check out my book "Poetic Crime (Serial Killers & True Crime)
Sun, July 10th, 2022 12:24amAuthor
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i will
Sun, July 10th, 2022 2:18pm