The Ecstasy and the Ignominy

Raven Akuma

WOW! This first chapter reads like a piece of art, I'm glad to see you still have that poetic touch to your writing. The story itself is interesting enough, with such a somber tone. In response to what you said in your Quickee, by the way, I would personally discourage the "update-as-you-write" method; I think it's something mangas, with cartoony aesthetics and much shorter chapters/arcs, can get away with. Same for calmer stories, especially fanfiction. When it comes to serious stories, though, it can get really tricky, and pressure can build on the writer really fast, so there should be more careful time and pacing. Of course, I'm also biased; I had my own project using this style, a psychological-horror novel that...went downhill. Badly. Maybe I'm just projecting, lol, hopefully someone else can share their opinion/experience here.

Anyway, this was a great first chapter, and I'd love to see more -whenever you may upload! :)

zilka.44

I liked the shadows at dark in my heart.

Sylvermyst

A very interesting chapter. I have issues with so many big words though. I felt like I was reading a dictionary. The dialogue felt odd as well because of long paragraphs. It just didn’t feel realistic. I would like to bee updated on future chapters just to see where your story goes.

MalaMasa

You write like a poet and as if you have a PH. D in Literature. Very well written story.

vhdez

You have a very poetic way with words that I envy. Honestly, I wish I could write more like you do. My only criticism would be that you are using too many words to tell the story. At least for my taste. I'm a less experienced writer so I won't be offended if you take my criticism with a grain of salt.