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Jinger in Stripperland
Jinger and David were struggling to have children. Frustrated David leaves her because of her job. Does Jinger take David back, the only man she has ever loved and give him another chance??? Or does she divorce and marry the man who loved her so good that
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As Magikchef88 says, it definitely seems like there is something underhand occurring and it will be interesting to see how the characterisation unfolds. In this chapter there is the suggestion that Jinger is vulnerable within the relationship. So far she appears pretty confident particularly through their verbal interaction - it seems like a pretty level playing field. In fact you mention that there is fear in his voice, I'm not sure if that's a typo. I think the story would benefit from a little more description between the dialogue so we can get into the chatacters' heads a little more. Maybe say more around the belt buckle and her fear/discomfort. You are very confident with your dialogue. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Tue, April 18th, 2023 5:11pm
PS - I meant to say, it's Scottish, not Scotch. (I am one.) :)
Tue, April 18th, 2023 6:13pm
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I'm going back to correct the typos.
Tue, April 18th, 2023 5:08pm
WOW! I love your quirky, jaunty, erotic style! Captivating and original! Great story!
Wed, May 10th, 2023 8:13am
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Thank You (now buy the book).
The story is engaging, one that provokes sympathy and pity. Such stories draw in readers and hook them, but it does so with format. Your format here is mostly dialogue, hence you need to perfect your punctuations and dialogue structure.
Tue, May 16th, 2023 12:03pm
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If you want a job as editor all you had to do was ask.
Tue, May 16th, 2023 8:16am
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Magikchef88
I have only read one chapter but I can tell I am going to enjoy this story. It seems to me there is something sinister with these main characters brewing but I could be wrong. My compliments on the title! Jinger in Stripperland! What an attention getter!
Mon, April 17th, 2023 7:45pmAuthor
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Thank You, you are very kind.
Mon, April 17th, 2023 12:55pm