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Un-ode to an Exam

Chapter 1 - Un-ode to an Exam

Fun fact: I'm reading this as procrastination to delay studying for exams. But anyway, yes, very nice poem. And one I can really sympathise with...

Submitted on Thu, May 10th, 2012 7:40pm

Jealousy? Love? Hate? What Drove Me?

Chapter 1 - Jealousy? Love? Hate? What Drove Me?

I really like the story, the whole "black and very dark grey" morality thing - disturbing to read in a good way. Just a few little "technical" things I'd recommend to improve, if I may. I'm not sure if this is a deliberate effect or not, but the way you structure sentances can sometimes make them hard to read, and I needed to go over a few two or t... Read More

Submitted on Mon, May 7th, 2012 7:48pm

The Legend Born

Chapter 1 - The Legend Born

I like the plot and the characters a lot, and most of the speech between George and Tibbot feels natural, and is funny. There are just two small problems, in my opinion: the paragraph where sir George explains about the dragon attacking the city feel unnatural, as if he's addressing the reader and not Tibbot - if you just rearanged this, maybe adde... Read More

Submitted on Sat, May 5th, 2012 9:35am

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