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Sick and twisted romance. I like it. You created a really intense, gripping scene here. I just wish you had prolonged the suspense a little before you let on that he was a vamp, maybe have her follow him somewhere or see him again later. Just a suggestion. :) Still, I'm impressed as that introduction chilled me to the bone. Applause from me.

Submitted on Sun, August 31st, 2014 2:35pm

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I think she should take the plunge. Life is only as good as the moments that thrill you. What a way to go out. Your hearts racing, the wind whipping all around. A weightless ruah. I think you conveyed that desire very well, as well as the conflict of fear inside. Well done.

Submitted on Sun, August 31st, 2014 7:12am

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Under the Pier, I think you will enjoy it. I think a lot of people would, if they would give it a chance. I can't get anyone to read past the first chapter.

Submitted on Sun, August 31st, 2014 6:21am

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