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Interesting piece of poetry I must say. I write poems on a phone app called " Poems " and well for me, my writing use to suck but I developed through the time. The confusing part of this poem is the rhyming. I don't know if you are trying to rhyme or not cause it seems like there are parts where you rhyme but then you don't and then you do again.... Read More

Submitted on Sun, April 30th, 2017 11:29am

Again like I mentioned in the first chapter comment section, you are repeating the " you said " and " she said " and etc a lot. Oh and this is too much dialogue. Maybe try to narrate more and use different words after a dialogue when you're indicating who said the dialogue, Good second chapter. Kinda confusing in some parts but the rate of this ... Read More

Submitted on Sun, April 30th, 2017 11:24am

Okay.. this first chapter is not bad. But there some things you must fix. You are repeating the " he said " and " she said " a lot. And for me and for others who read this it's a bit of a tiring thing. The storyline seems like something we can all relate with today's life, Loved the introduction and good moderated drama. For this first chapter ... Read More

Submitted on Sun, April 30th, 2017 11:19am

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