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Hey there! Welcome to Booksie! I hope you enjoy your time here! I haven't been here too long, but I have. If you want to read an action-packed story, feel free to check out my story Revolution.
Hello and welcome to Booksie! If you had the free time could you please check out my popular new novel, Containment Trial, and tell me what you think. Thank you and I would be happy to return the favour ? ?
Hi there and welcome to Booksie. I can tell by your profile already that you are a brilliant writer. I would really love some feedback on a short story I wrote called The Bloody Nuptials. If you have some free time up your sleeve I would appreciate it. Thanks in advance. Happy writing. :-)
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All Men Dream - Chapter 1 - Prologue
by Needless
Intriguing! I think you can cut back your words so the readers don't have to work quite so hard to understand your point. One quick example: He said with a pained expression on his face ... could simple be he winced or he grimaced ... Same goes for she furrowed her eyebrows. Maybe sum it up to: she frowned ... The lines in the opening paragrap... Read More
Submitted on Mon, June 23rd, 2014 1:11am