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Magical Desires

Chapter 1 - Splash, wake up!

This is a good start - I like the contrasting atmospheres at the beginning: the panicked horror of the dream/nightmare vs the sibling pranks made for an interesting mixture of moods. The dynamic between them is very realistic (speaking as someone who has a brother and who has been doused in liquids other than water, thanks to him) and entertaining,... Read More

Submitted on Fri, October 23rd, 2020 11:03am

Weight of the Heart

Chapter 1 - The Eagle

This is a really good start - your descriptions are well written and set the scene perfectly. I like that you introduced the character by having him talk to an elderly woman - it showed a different side to him that made his intentions in going to the feast even more shocking and dramatic. The bit about him "nervously" holding his breath showed a di... Read More

Submitted on Fri, October 23rd, 2020 10:16am


Chapter 2 - The Man in the Duckbill Cap

I like the changing POVs - the omnipresent narrative is working well and is great for getting an insight into each of the character's thoughts on what's happening (especially at the end, when we heard the thoughts of both Wei and Amanda, and then the dialogue from the rest of them chiming in). It's a hard narrative to pull off as it can be quite me... Read More

Submitted on Thu, October 22nd, 2020 6:08pm

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Fat Girl Thin

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