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Hi I've read about half the chapter and I'm sorry I haven't read the whole thing but I was half asleep reading it. I will keep reading later when I have free time. I enjoyed the concept and you have good flow in conversations. But I feel like you need to redo your exposition part in the beginning. You write a large block of exposition that is hard ... Read More

Submitted on Sun, February 22nd, 2015 2:04pm

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If you guys leave comments it would be very helpful! :D

Submitted on Thu, February 19th, 2015 5:39pm

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It'a an OK story but why did you say terrorist? It feels kind of out of place to say "THE GUYS ATTACKING OUT SCHOOL ARE TERRORIST!" Not that it's bad or anything but you kind of have to justify it. But other then that it's a OK story, keep writing lol

Submitted on Fri, February 13th, 2015 10:31pm

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