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~ Chapter 1 ~
I scanned my watch, just thirty minutes left for the cafe closing time. I watched as the last customer slipped out of the cafe bar and another one entered and ordered burger and fries. I tapped my foot, as he slowly forked the fries rolling it in ketchup. Dammit! This was gonna take forever.
After some torturous twenty minutes, the man walked out and that was my cue to sigh in relief. I turned to wrap up my stuff just then I heard the cafe door open. Now which Moron cannot read the flipped sign outside that said ‘Closed’.
I’ll get the facts straight and be outta here.
I strode over to the table; the man seemed to be sitting with his back facing me and had picked up the menu card. I had to refrain from being really rude, I declared. “Sir, we are closed.”
The man glanced up from the menu card, almost taking his eyes off the card reluctantly, and passed me the lascivious smile. People usually don’t smile at the waitress, they complain. This was a first. I smiled back, if he thought the smile was gonna make me flip the ‘Closed’ sign to ‘Open’, boy was he so wrong.
“Just one order isn’t gonna hurt, is it?”
I guess it wouldn’t.
It almost felt like he was pleading me with those electrifying baby blue eyes, challenging me to refuse. He was being very sweet and I must admit a face like that is not easy to refuse. I’m sure he isn’t even aware of the word ‘No’
I take back my words. It’s hard to resist a smiling face like that, “What can I get you, sir?”
“That’s more like it.” he grinned, running a hand through his messy dark hair, “How about a grilled cheese sandwich and iced tea?”
“Sure.” I jotted down the order, “coming right up.”
Twenty minutes later I brought him the food and placed it on his table, “Enjoy.”
From that day onwards, the man started appearing every day to our cafe, ordered the exact same thing and ogled me with curiosity, his eyes travelled my every move every second. It was a little too over-whelming and uncomfortable after a week so I would return his stares with the same burning intensity which would only amuse him some more. He winked flirtatiously. Talk about being shameless? I told Jessie (co-worker and friend) about him only to be informed that he was a regular customer and mostly turned up during the mornings. It was only since that evening he met me that there was a sudden change in his schedule.
Wow. Add one name to my list of secret admirers.
Abigail, you’re a genius, trapping a fine looking man like that. Way to go Abi!
Was that man Amnesic, like that one girl from the Adam Sadler movie? Fifty first dates was it? Oh No! Please, I have no patience.
“Here’s your grilled cheese sandwich sir and your lemon ice-tea.”
The exact same order.
I turned on my heels, when I heard him call me, “Abigail.”
“You know my name?” I asked him dumbfounded.
“Yes.” He smiled, when it occurred to him that I was still confused, he continued, “I read---“ he pointed a finger towards my shirt, “your badge.”
Bummer!
“Is there anything else I can get you?” I asked him.
“I was wondering if you would like to go on a date with me?” he asked me shyly, but I didn’t miss the stark confidence in his words.
It took all my willpower to say “sorry sir, but I don’t really date strangers.”
“Too bad” he stared straight into my eyes. “Because I do.”
Smarty pants has got a smarty mouth.
He climbed to his feet, leaned into my ear to whisper, the wonderful swoon-worthy cologne filled my nostrils, “I can get very persuasive.”
Well, good luck with that.
So he was gonna force me to date him? I didn’t even know this guy’s name.
“Look Man, you seem like a guy from a well groomed family. Don’t you read the word ‘poverty’ written so clearly on my forehead?”
He laughed, “Give me one good reason why you don’t want to give me the time of your day?”
“Well, for starters, I don’t even know your name.”
“That’s a clever way to inquire, Abigail; I would’ve gladly told you if you would have asked me directly.” My name sounded musical coming from his mouth, “I’m Clayton Black.”
“Well, Mr Black, I will think about your offer and get back to you when I can.”
Clayton smiled gleefully, “Don’t keep me waiting.”
That said he stormed out of the cafe, leaving me to mop up the tables. I started to pick up the plates when a black journal caught my eye. I peeked into the booth and grabbed for the journal.
Hmm, mystery man keeps a journal. How very modern.
I skimmed page after page. The odd beautiful dark sketches piqued at my curiosity, some looked like they were drawn with charcoal. There were a few things written below in a language I didn’t quite understand. Just when I tried decoding it, the door of the cafe barged open and in walked the owner of the journal.
He seemed pissed by the fact that my new hobby included snooping his private journal. He snatched the dark object out my grasp, a little too aggressively, his fiery eyes blazed, “Curiosity killed the cat.”
“I didn’t read anything.”
“Well I hope you didn’t.” I didn’t miss the malice that dripped his tone; the cheerful guy had taken a turn and disappeared, “I don’t like it when people touch my stuff. I won’t say it again, you have been warned.”
“Look, I’m sorry. I swear I didn’t read anything.”
“I’ll take your word for it.” The pools of oceanic blue eyed me suspiciously, “so..I’ll see you tomorrow?”
I just nodded. One date wouldn’t hurt now, would it?
If a date was all it would take for him to stop bothering me, maybe it was worth the try. Anyone would dive head first to an opportunity of dating a man like him, all fancy pants and smart mouth but something about him rung the Emergency Red sirens and told me to catch the next bullet train.
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Submitted: September 10, 2013
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Wow! I am sooooo happy you've got anothr novel, i love your work and stories so much!
Tue, September 10th, 2013 3:43pm
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Thanks so much Ikky :) It means alot to me~
Tue, September 10th, 2013 1:38pm
Argh! Booksie cut off my comment. Sorry! Anyways, this Clyton guy seems so mysterious...i love it haha! And it was weird how at one point he seems so nice and relaxed and the other he is so damn pissed, woah! But i know i will start to love this guy haha! ;) i cannot wait for more, i am so hooked! Update me please, :) x
Tue, September 10th, 2013 3:48pm
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I think I got that comment too :) You'll find out more about Clayton in the later chapters. Thanks so much for reading. will surely keep you updated~
Tue, September 10th, 2013 1:39pm
Ahh I honestly thought he was at least one of them you mentioned, he not's :O ooooo, honestly loved it. Interested by the name of your novel, then once I read it BOOM the whole of chapter one is interesting. Loved it please KMU. Clayton seems hot :D xx thanks for the reading request, please KMU ~Chloe xx
Tue, September 10th, 2013 3:49pm
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LOL I actually thought people would think so and that's mostly the reason why I cleared the doubt below. Thanks so much for reading Chloe :) Your comments are always wonderful and your welcome. will surely keep you updated~
Tue, September 10th, 2013 1:40pm
Sorry for checking it late. Nop, one date wouldn't hurt, but it still counts. Clayton sounds like a serious guy, at the journal scene. KMU!! Can't wait for more.
Tue, September 10th, 2013 4:54pm
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It's alright :) I'm glad you read it. Thanks so much for the wonderful cover. will surely keep you updated~
Tue, September 10th, 2013 1:41pm
Nice start. Sounds really interesting. Cant wait for the next chapter:)
Tue, September 10th, 2013 6:13pm
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Thanks so much for reading :) will surely keep you updated~
Tue, September 10th, 2013 1:43pm
I was happy to accept a reading request from you! :) You totally deserved it! X) Anyways, great start of a novel you have here! KMU please ~
Tue, September 10th, 2013 6:39pm
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Aww Thanks so much love :) I'm very glad you liked it. will surely keep you updated~
Tue, September 10th, 2013 1:45pm
So happy you got another Novel your work is beyond brilliant!. He sounds really sexy with light eyes and dark hair and all mysterious;). Cant wait to see what his dirty secrets are! LOVE. kmu! :D
Tue, September 10th, 2013 7:31pm
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Thanks so much :) This comment made my day!!! haha xD You'll find out about his secrets soon ;) will surely keep you updated~
Tue, September 10th, 2013 1:46pm
omg love it, ohhh mr Black sounds a bit creepy!! haha KMU gorgeous! xx
Tue, September 10th, 2013 10:32pm
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LOL I wanted to portray him creepy :) Thanks so much for reading. Will surely keep you updated lovely~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 1:18am
i really really like this story. wonder what the guys keeping in his journal. o_o kmu!
Tue, September 10th, 2013 10:39pm
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Thanks so much for reading Aniqa :) You'll find out about him in the later chapters. will surely keep you updated~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 2:12am
OMG IF THIS GUY JUST CAME OUT OFNNOWHERE & FLIRTED WITH ME ID BE COMPLETE ! But I love her attitude towards this guy! It genuine ! But Clayton ( LOVE the name ) he sounds so cute/ dark/ and funny. I know what he is 'Say It' he's a really hot guy who stalks Abigail :D ! Hahaha close enough xD keep me updated ! Liking it though !!
Tue, September 10th, 2013 10:44pm
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LOL xD This comment had me laughing. Aww I'm glad you like his name ;) I'll let you keep guessing. Thanks for reading :) will surely keep you updated~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 2:15am
Of course I am NOT disappointed at all with this start! It's amazing sweets! I already distrust Clayton- he's creepy. But we'll see if he changes my mind. KMU!!
Tue, September 10th, 2013 11:52pm
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I'm very glad you enjoyed reading it Sarah :) Yes I was rooting for creepy ;) Thanks for reading. will surely keep you updated~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 2:17am
Okay so he's not a supernatural. Then is he an agent or an artist? Sorry :P Just a guess. I so wanna know. Keep me updated about this, please...:)
Wed, September 11th, 2013 1:20am
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I like how you guess ;) That never crossed my mind. I'll let you keep guessing. Thanks so much for reading. will surely keep you updated~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 2:39am
OK sooooo here is my review..
KMU XD Although this does seem kind of like your other novel, it does have a different feel to it and I LIKE IT.Clayton, at first, did seem like a super natural creature like a vampire or whatnot, but I read the what you wrote on the bottom. Then I half groaned and half squealed. The groan because I would like to read about a vampire/werewolf/blah Clayton (by the way..i love the name) But I squealed because dark, dangerous and sexy is the best thing to read about (to me :D) I love Abigail and the way she 'handled' Clayton ..and I MUST SEE INSIDE THE JOURNAL
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I like to make my male leads mysterious ;) but I assure you this novel is nothing like DBAR. aww I'm sorry if your disappointed he isn't a vampire haha. I'm glad you like the name. Thanks so much for reading :) will surely keep you updated~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 2:52am
This first chapter kept my interest until the very end. The introduction of the characters was done very well. Also the dialogue was interesting to read. I even tried one of the pieces of dialogue aloud, and I found it funny. You had a great tone shift near the end when he left his journal behind while she was reading it. Also the slight transition of her thoughts really builds up the plot.
Wed, September 11th, 2013 2:57am
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Exactly what I wanted to hear :) haha I'm very glad you did that. Thanks so much for reading and commenting. hope you'll continue to read further~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 3:00am
I love your work, keeps me riveted. Good job
Wed, September 11th, 2013 4:08am
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Thanks so much Laura :) hope you'll continue to read further~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 3:07am
The story is interesting and i love Abigail's attitude. And your guy,
well he seems like someone with
lots of money, a past and some
dark secrets. But i wonder why he's
interested in a simple girl like Abigail...i'm hoping i'll get my
answers in coming chapters. :-) :-)
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My guy ;) I like the sound of it. You'll find out what he is upto in the later chapters :) Thanks so much for reading Pari. It means alot to me~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 5:29am
woooow another great story i luved it i really thought it would be similar to rowan's story anyway you have confessed it at the end that it is not similar to rowan's story. iam soo eager to read more kmu on both the stories.
Wed, September 11th, 2013 3:23pm
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Yes I thought some of you might think it's same as DBAR :) I'm very glad you liked it. Thanks so much for reading. will surely keep you updated on both~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 9:29am
"...the wonderful swoon-worthy cologne filled my nostrils..." - what does it smell like? There are a couple of times where you could expand on things like these, simple and yet effective if written in the write manner. Please tell me that she isn't going to supid enough to go on a date with him. I'm curious as to see if she goes or not considering all the warning signs that have clearly been displayed for her ha. This is intriguing because he does appear to be a bit of a mystery, almost like two personalities there as well. Also, just to let you know I never once thought about him being supernatural, to me he comes across as a stalker that's decided she's his new obsession. Urgh, creepy. lol
Wed, September 11th, 2013 3:51pm
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I do agree with you :) I'll make the necessary changes. haha You'll find out if she does in the next chapter. I'm quite relieved that you don't think he is supernatural. Thanks so much for reading Kathy. It means alot to me that you read it even though it wasn't your genre~
Wed, September 11th, 2013 9:31am
Amazing way to start a novel!! I'm wondering what's his secret, he seems fairly odd and the journal part was a little creepy. I'm very eager to know more and see the story unfold so keep me updated! :)
Wed, September 11th, 2013 6:16pm
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You'll find out about him soon ;) Thanks so much for reading and commenting. will surely keep you updated~
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Awesome new novel. It is going to get interesting. I can tell. I have a gift for these things. Don't wait too long with the updates. On both novels. Kmu
Tue, September 10th, 2013 3:25pmAuthor
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Thanks so much lovely :) It means alot to me. will surely keep you updated on both.
Tue, September 10th, 2013 1:37pm