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Spring singing through the trees as Sheridan dances on the soft white carpet think of how lucky she must be to be marring Dillion but then she rememberd she was pregnant. When her sister walk in she jumped onto her bed and opened a random book to page 559 and she pretended to read!! "OMG ITS YOU" she screams as she runs over to her sister "i know your pregnant" "What........ no .......how ..........maybe........ no way....... yes" she said trying to avoid her sisters evil glare she runs down stairs and pulls out a gun "What do you want me to kill myself now" screams Sheridan and Melony stares at her in aww "what where did that come from" says Melony in her grasping voice "I HAVE ENOUGH TROUBLES WITHOUT YOU HATING MY FIANCE AND HATING MY TRUE LOVE" " YOUR GETTING MARRIED AND WHY DID YOU LAY DILLION" "I DIDNT TYSON RAPED ME" and the house went silent for no more than a minute"tyson did what to you!!!!!!" "yes he raped me 3 months ago i have been pregnant for 3 months okay you happy" and Sheridan runs away crying her eyes out

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"what happend to the old times me and you we never fought, never hurt ecother" asked melony three hours later "thats all over okay im now a vampire does that mean i want to be no if i had a choice between being a vampire and being alive for 30 days i would be alive for 30 days rather than dead for my whole life, im the walking dead, i see dead people everywhere and i cant change that inless i give my immortalitly to some one else my baby its going to be a vampire" as Sheridan melts out all her worries her sister starts to cry "Sheridan im a slut" "Why ? im the slut not you there is nothing you have done to be slut" "yes there is,.............. im pregnant to but its Tysons child and me and Dillion did it yesterday thats when he screamed out your name and thats how i found out your pregnant i didnt want to tell you cause the first thing that ran into my mind was she's a whore and now i think im the whore" exclaims melony. Sheridan gasping for air she faints!!!

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Submitted: December 15, 2009

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daytona9683

this is so short because its just the 5th chapter and what its about i was going to add a part with dillion but im saving that tell next chapter

Tue, December 15th, 2009 11:19pm

dantana

I'm really not trying to be mean but try putting what the characters sentences spaced. like,
"what happend to the old times me and you we never fought, never hurt ecother" asked melony, three hours later.
"thats all over okay im now a vampire does that mean i want to be no if i had a choice between being a vampire and being alive for 30 days i would be alive for 30 days rather than dead for my whole life, im the walking dead, i see dead people everywhere and i cant change that inless i give my immortalitly to some one else my baby its going to be a vampire" as Sheridan melts out all her worries her sister starts to cry. spacing makes it easier to read. also try not having all the plots happen at once. time them, put a few chapters in between twists. but leave a little hint every now and then that there is a twist. I'm not trying to sound mean, I'm sorry. I love this chapter. what happens to sheridan?

Wed, December 16th, 2009 11:07pm

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um well the hints i will think about i thought it tied in nice but i will think about it

Wed, December 16th, 2009 3:28pm

xxxGirlNextDoorxx

its good, but hard to read as dantana said. anyway, I like it. Its cool. :)

Tue, December 29th, 2009 8:21pm

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okay sorry for the hardenss i just see all these stories that have it like that so i tried it and it looked to short so im going back to the normal way with an enter between each few secntances

Wed, December 30th, 2009 3:34pm

Paranormal Activity

i liked it keep me update
:)

Tue, January 5th, 2010 3:18am

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wow you sure read that fast but thanks for commenting and if you add me it will be way easier to keep updated

Mon, January 4th, 2010 7:20pm

mommy3

I enjoyed reading it . please keep me updated :D

Tue, January 5th, 2010 4:01am

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okay i will do tell all your friends please

Mon, January 4th, 2010 8:01pm

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