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OKAY!
Another novel! So here's my introduction of the story because it is going to be a little confusing at first,, I apologise.
Harmony Faith Deashay
Harmony Faith Deshay: 18 years old, doesn't go to school, looks after her 5 younger siblings.
Max Deshay
Max Deshay: close friends with his sister Harmony, knows how their mother is really doing
Carol Deshay (Mother)
For the rest of the Deshay family, you can imagine how they look, because it seems my computer has decided to eat the photos I had -.-
Ryanne Hill(17)
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Ayden Hill (12)
-loves to be outdoors
Denver Ole (19)
-oldest sibling out of Ryanne and Ayden.
-author, publish a best seller,
-Half sibling.
So, this story will be written LIKE journal entries, but with specific dialogue, or in first person if you prefer.
SUMMARY!
It takes place in 2052, it's in the future (obviously) but it's like back in time, because they're growing their own food again. Canada is one of the poorer countries, and Eastern Europe is like..the richest I suppose. Harmony Deshay is 18, and has five younger siblings, the youngest is two, and the oldest is 13, (next to her) her mother is dying and her father walked out two years ago. Harmony is basically looking after all of the kids and fending for them. Their family is poor as she lives ina small poor town in Ontario, Canada.
There is also another character written by a friend of mine, I do not know the character's name at this point and time, but she is writing the life of a 17 year old female in rich Eastern Europe where wars are breaking out, she has a younger brother that is 12, and an older brother that is 19.
Between the two llives Harmony meets the ones in Europe after a tradgic accident back home, she wants to go do something in the wars, but with something stop her?
NOW! The first entry will be dated, but it will be in Harony's POV (Point of View) and the next chapter will be the same day, but in the other character's POV.
I think that just about cover everything, I will be reminding you who's POV it is at the beginning of each chapter though.
Submitted: April 01, 2012
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sounds great if you post another chapter tell me about it girl love you and keep up the good work k(;
Mon, April 2nd, 2012 1:18pmOMG! COOL! 8DD
Tue, April 3rd, 2012 12:37amgood luck. not much of a novel reader on line though.
Wed, April 4th, 2012 8:46amThe outline looks promising. My Emotion's Soldier novel (which is another Dystopian future setting) deals with the themes of emotions and control. One of these days I'll actually finish it.
Anyway, are you moving toward a more theme based message of global war and the affects on the characters or is this a struggling romance set during a war?
If you're going with the route, I would reference films like In the Land of Blood and Honey and Casualities of War just to get an idea of where your characters will progress.
Good luck.
great job
Sat, April 7th, 2012 3:33pmgreat job i think it is great
Mon, April 9th, 2012 2:26amSounds pretty good so far. I really enjoy dystopian themed stories, maybe you could try adding a little current reality to the mix? anyways, KMU! :)
Tue, April 10th, 2012 4:18amok, like the plot so far, off to the start!
Wed, April 11th, 2012 5:04amGOOD WORK!
Wed, April 11th, 2012 12:13pmSounds good(:
Thu, April 12th, 2012 12:21amIt sounds like my kind of story already! I like the concept of it being in the future, with civilization ending up with a bit of a backstep. Love it! Also... What's kmu mean?
Thu, April 12th, 2012 1:22amI really enjoyed the format of this story and your writing style. It allowed the reader to connect to the characters and really get in their heads. really liked.
Thu, April 12th, 2012 9:33pmThis is great!!! however I hope if it gets published there wont be real wars of countries because you've made some of the countries poorer than the others..LOL Just kidding XD Carry on and live your dreams cuz you've got potential :)
Thu, April 12th, 2012 9:43pmlike it! seems realistic! XD
Sat, April 14th, 2012 3:21amsounds good kinda like the declaration xx :D
Sat, April 14th, 2012 5:30pmIt looks really interesting, but I find it a bit hard to read. The plot seems just a little twisted, which I love!
Sun, April 15th, 2012 4:49pmI'll read this whole thing tomorrow, hopefully =D i tend to be too busy to read stuff though.
Wed, April 18th, 2012 12:33ami liked it soo much. thanx for writing it!!
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Sounds good! Kmu
Mon, April 2nd, 2012 9:28amYAIL xxxxx
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Thank you, will do (:
Mon, April 2nd, 2012 3:23am