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A strand of short, deep blue hair flies into my face. I  tuck it behind my ear and punch the numbers of Clarissa's number into my phone, glaring at the school doors. Parties were never my thing.

Amy, my "best friend" is inside, enjoying herself, while I freeze my backside off outside waiting for her sister to pick us up. I wold much rather be cold than be inside, but I would like it if her sister could actually pick us up on time. I am on the last number when a silver volvo pulls up beside me.

"Not late, am I?" Clarissa asks, sneering.

"Nope." I growl, staring at my phone.

"So how was the party?" She asks. 

"Oh, it was lovely." I say, imitiating Amy's voice.

My gaze darts to the doors as they swing open, Amy rushing out, laughing wildly. Two boys run after her. My eyes widen as she grabs my wrist and drags me to the car. "Open it!" She yells to Clarissa. Clarissa rolls her eyes and taps her keys. Amy yanks me in and shuts the door, panting. One of the boys screams as the door is caught on his finger, and the other boy points and laughs.

  Clarissa steps in the car, muttering in amusement to herself. As she stars the car, Amy smiles at me. "Suprised they weren't chasing you!" I grin playfully and shove her toward the window. A silver-grey gleam outside of it catches my eye. I turn my head toward it as we pass by. "Hey!" I whisper-yell. "Check out that wolf!" Amy glances at me. "Can't you calm your wolf obsession for just a few minutes?" She asks. I don't respond, gaze glued to the window. Clarissa slams on the brakes and we lurch forward. "Quickly. And don't go too far." I smile gratefully at her, sliding past Amy and out of the car.

I quietly sneak up on the wolf, careful not to disturb him. I've never been this close to a wolf before. I remove my stare for a moment, darting behind an old pine tree. The wolf stands as if waiting for something. I cock my head slightly to get a better view, but I stumble and knock a pine nut to the ground. Startled, the wolf turns his head my way.

His sad gaze cuts like knives into me, his eyes are deep blue pools of despair. Like he really wants something, but has almost given up hope. I double over a little bit in shock of how human the gaze seems. I want to help him, but I know I can't and I have to go anyway.

I scurry back to the car, still dazed. Swinging open the car door and yell "I'm back!" But reflected in front of me are two empty seats. My mind whirls in panic and my heart starts to pound. Don't Panic. Don't Panic.

"Amy?" "AMY? CLAR-"

But my cry is cut short by a muffling leathery hand. Now my heart beats so loudly I am convinced that the person attached to the hand can hear it. My eyes widen as I watch Amy being taken into a long white van by black-clothed figures. I fight as hard as I can, screaming and kicking.

Clarissa manages to escape her capturer as he tries to assist in leading Amy into the car.

"RUN!" She yells to me. 


  And she tries to do the same herself, but her capturer takes a hold of her, and it takes mine to help. In the moment of stall, I give Clarissa a split-second look. "Run.." She whispers. I have no choice but to obey. My pursuer chases after me, but I have a headstart.

After a while, I stop hearing his crashing footsteps, but don't dare look behind until I reach my house. Seeing a large figure behind me at my glance, I scramble with the door. It's locked. I'm going to die. My eyes start to roll back into my head. No, not now.. I have to get through this. But the world fades to black.

Submitted: April 19, 2016

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Nice opening to the book! It makes me want to read more!

Thu, April 21st, 2016 1:11am



Wed, April 20th, 2016 6:26pm

lps Coolkeys24

cool book

Thu, April 21st, 2016 1:13am


Thanks! Glad you like it!

Wed, April 20th, 2016 6:26pm

Tim Quinn

I think you could definitely go back and change the formatting here to make the story look better and read more easily. Break it into a few paragraphs, give each part of dialogue its own line. You also have a few typos. Further, I am not sure that "frustratedly" is a word. Seems like you could have the start of a good story here if you fixed it up some.

Sun, April 24th, 2016 4:48am


Thank you for reviewing! I'll be sure to do that.

Sun, April 24th, 2016 1:10pm

Tim Quinn

Looks better already!

Mon, April 25th, 2016 1:10am



Mon, April 25th, 2016 4:27am

Leila Darrah

wow this is really good!!!! Your a great writer, btw you should check out my latest essay I am a teenager and it gives an open view on how I feel about todays society and social media.

Tue, April 26th, 2016 7:14am


thanks, I'll check it out!

Tue, April 26th, 2016 3:23am

Leila Darrah

I think you did really good as I said before, but it is a little confusing to understand in the beginning and the middle, try to clarify the events that are taking place.The reader kind of gets lost in the middle because there is a lot of confusion so just make it more clear and easy to understand :)

Tue, April 26th, 2016 7:19am


Okay, I'll ty to do that :)

Tue, April 26th, 2016 3:25am

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