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Chapter 1 – A Lost Love

Mara was pacing back and forth outside an operation room. She should be in school now but a road accident brought her to wait in the hospital. After long gruelling hours of waiting and praying, the door opened. A surgeon stepped out.

“I am sorry. We’ve tried our best to save her.” The surgeon uttered to Mara. An apology? This is not what she wanted to hear. NO! Mummy can’t be dead. Mara chased after the surgeon, her only hope left.

“Please. Please save her!” Her trembling hands grabbed his arm.

“I am really sorry.” He hung his head low, unable to look at this 16 year old orphan. You might ask “where’s her Dad?” No, Mara had no father. She never saw him in her entire life. Mummy was all she had.

Mara felt her hands slide off the surgeon. Mummy, you’ve got so many things to tell me. You can’t die. You promised! You promised me! Her wobbly legs took her into the operation theatre. A white cloth covered her mother.

“Mum? It’s time to wake up. Where’s my breakfast? Didn’t you say you are going to buy some pancakes?” Mara stood by the bed.

“Mummy? Can’t you hear me? Why are you still sleeping?” Mara pulled off the white cloth. The body was tinged with blood – limp and cold. Mara’s fingers lingered around her mother’s face. She touched her mother’s hair…

“Mommy, why’d you com your hair so many times?”

“Mara, hair is a very important feature that defines a woman. It is our crown. If our crown resembles a bird’s nest, people will think we’re lazy and dirty. So we need to make sure our hair looks beautiful. I am sure my Mara wants to be a beautiful princess.”

“Mum, your hair is in a huge mess now. Wake up! You need to comb your crown.” No, mummy cannot comb her hair anymore

Mara collapsed to her knees. Why? Why did mum have to buy pancakes today? Why must the bus appear at that time? Why didn’t the driver see mum cross the road at that time? Why? Why? Why?

No. This is all just a dream.

“Mummy, I want you to open your eyes right now! I am not playing with you anymore… Please mum… Look at me.” Nothing changed.

“Your mother’s gone to heaven Mara. You’ll be coming over to stay with us. We’ll miss her. She was a great sister to me.” It was Uncle Philip’s voice. He entered the room to comfort his niece.

“NO! Mum’s not dead! You’re lying! Get out! Mum hates liars!” Mara shook her head desperately and shoved her uncle towards the door.

Uncle Philip did not resist. Tears streamed down his eyes as his heart ached for his sister. His tears brought reality crashing into Mara’s world. She wanted to cry but could not. Mum never liked me to cry.

A globe of air held in her throat made it tough for her to speak. “Please bring me a comb. I want to comb her hair for the last time,” Mara forced the words out of her mouth…

Submitted: March 31, 2009

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omggggggggggggggggggg i am crying aready hate you fairy wings u made me cry but omg love it u better tell me when you update -.-

Tue, March 31st, 2009 2:26pm


Aww... Pls don't hate me. *Offers tissue* I'm happy that you love this though. >.<

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:39pm

crystal aqua

aww...... that was so sad..... *lightbulb turns on* -rushes to bathroom and grabs comb!!-

Tue, March 31st, 2009 2:31pm


Thank you for fetching the comb. *Pass to Mara*

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:36pm

yuu shindemura

hmmm...i've seen scenarios like this and yeah...that does happen in real hospital life (sorry i kinda got numb on this things). anywayz you depicted it well---so well as what a real incident would!

Tue, March 31st, 2009 6:28pm


To be honest, I never had such experience before. So this was built on my imagination and perhaps the influence of movies and TV. I'm surprised that its realistic. Thanks! ^.^

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:25pm


this is soooo sad! =[ =[ =[
but good story!

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 11:09pm


Thanks for your compliment. ^.^

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 6:02pm


Aww so sad so soon! This is a very touching chapter! Nicely done :)

Sat, April 4th, 2009 3:24am


Yupz... It is pretty sad. Thanks!

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 8:52pm


wow that was so sad.
great writing

Wed, April 8th, 2009 7:04am


I'm glad you felt the sadness. ^.^ (Oops, I think i sound a little saddist!)

Wed, April 8th, 2009 12:33am


omg, you are a great writer, i had tears in my eyes, that was so beautiful and so sad

Thu, April 16th, 2009 1:12pm


Aww... Thanks! I am flattered by your kind words. I'm glad my story touched you. ^.^

Thu, April 16th, 2009 7:27am


AWWWW!!! I feel so sorry for her!!! lol you have successfully made me cry!! =]

Fri, April 17th, 2009 10:19am


YES! I am so happy I made you cry! Oh no! I sound like a sadist. Haha... Thanks for reading!

Fri, April 17th, 2009 4:34am



Fri, April 17th, 2009 8:10pm


Yea... Her mother's death is a major bitter event in Mara's life.

Fri, April 17th, 2009 5:01pm


That is sad you almost made me cry which for me is almost means a lot.(It takes too much for me to cry so people stop trying after 30 minutes.)

Fri, April 24th, 2009 1:17pm


Wow! I'm flattered. Thank you! I'm glad I'd almost made you cry.

Fri, April 24th, 2009 5:29pm


wow, that was reeeeele intense! it made me tear up! wow, u've got talent for writing!


Sat, April 25th, 2009 11:19pm


Aww... Thanks! Wow! I actually managed to make you tear up?! That's awesome! Haha... Thank you for your compliment! ^.^

Sun, April 26th, 2009 5:26pm

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