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Chapter 30 – My Daddy

A week had passed since Mara bid farewell to her beloved Jun Xiong. She had missed him terribly. Her heart had suffered the same pain as the loss of her mother. Mara had not returned to the small lake again. Her emotional self forbade her to do so.

On this particular evening, Mara went to the hospital. Jun Xiong’s father was scheduled for discharge today. She had been hoping the poor man would be able to treat her with more friendliness.

“Hi! How are you feeling?” Mara asked in a cheery manner as she entered his ward.

“Hey Miss! I didn’t expect you to come. I am feeling much better already. Thank you very much.” Jun Xiong’s Dad smiled widely. The gloom overlying his features had disappeared. He’s a changed man; Mara felt happy for him.

“That’s great to hear!” Mara returned his smile.

“Anyways, I am sorry for all the harsh words I’d used on you. I am very grateful to you for everything.” He apologized sincerely.

“It’s ok. You don’t have to apologize. I’m happy that you managed to see Jun Xiong.” Mara had only wanted to help Jun Xiong. Can you see how happy your father is now? She turned to the window and asked the sky.

“Can I see the pocket watch you have?” Jun Xiong’s father requested suddenly. Mara had not realized her watch slipped out from beneath her shirt.

“Sure.” She took it out and passed to him.

“Jun Xiong gave this to you?”

No, he didn’t. Wait! Why would Jun Xiong’s father say that? Mara stared at his Dad incredulously.

“This watch…” Mara was dumbstruck.

“I gave this to Jun Xiong when he turned sixteen. He had always carried it wherever he went.” Jun Xiong’s father was smiling at his fond memories with his only child.

This watchthis watch actually belongs to him! Mara recalled Jun Xiong’s reaction when he first saw it. Jigsaw pieces of her memory were slowly forming into an obvious picture. Why he had paled then?! Why that song?! Dance with my father?

“Are you ok?” Jun Xiong’s father inched towards Mara. Worry lines creased his brows. She looked at his eyes… They were brown. Jun Xiong’s eyes had been different. What was his colour? Hazel! The same shade of hazel as her

“Hey!” Mara heard Jun Xiong’s father calling out for her as she dashed out of the hospital. She ran countless streets. Why?! Why didn’t you tell me?! Her legs were driven by the endless questions in her mind. Mara collapsed onto the grass when she reached the small lake, their blessed sanctuary

“Jun Xiong! I want to see you!” She screamed. All she heard was the echo of her voice.

“Jun Xiong!” Mara yelled his name repeatedly. Her voice became hoarse. She gave up and stared at the stars brightening up the dark night. Like Mum, he could never hear me again

Mara was sobbing miserably. Her last hope had left her. There was no more father for her to search for. Mummy, is Daddy with you now? She gazed at the stars. The brilliance of two distinct stars began to warm her heart. Jun Xiong had asked me about the stars before

Mara, there’s a bright star shining tonight. Do you think that is my mum?”

There are two dazzling stars in this particular night. Mummy and Daddy! Both of you are here with me! “I love you Mum! I love you Dad! Daddy, you are the most amazing Dad I could ever have…” Mara’s voice was carried into the high heavens.

She flipped open her pocket watch. The beautiful melody was playing once more. This time, Mara began to sing with the melody…

“Twinkle, twinkle, little star,

How I wonder what you are.

Up above the world so high,

Like a diamond in the sky.

Twinkle, twinkle, little star,

How I wonder what you are…”

~ THE END ~


Submitted: April 17, 2009

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ThumaLina

oh my gee!!!! That was awesome!!! But...not what i expected... but still wow...cool! Awesoem!!!! YAY!!!!

Sequel???

+hecate+

Fri, April 17th, 2009 2:02am

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Thanks Hecate... A sequel? I am not too sure about that. I am glad you found the ending unexpected. If i write a sequel, I'll be sure to inform you. But right now, I still remember I took up your fantastic suicidal challenge. Which is ending soon. I already worked on it. Hope you'll enjoy that! ^.^

P.S. Your challenge really challenged me to explore something I never wrote before. Haha...

Thu, April 16th, 2009 7:22pm

BigSunShine

aww bless! Im really glad you asked me to read this! Ive cried all the way through and my parents think theirs summat wrong lol! i really loved this!

Fri, April 17th, 2009 2:06pm

Author
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Aww... It's so awesome of you to finish my entire story at a go! Thanks so... so.. much! I'm glad you loved it. *All Smiles*

Fri, April 17th, 2009 8:14am

eloiseB

jesus christ! he was her dad?!!! bloody hell. woah. Very good story- did not expect that- AT ALL! but i'm so glad! anyway, loved this story =D

Fri, April 17th, 2009 2:57pm

Author
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Hmm... I did felt pretty bad while writing this. From the start, I've planned for Jun Xiong to be her dad. Yay! Thank goodness you still love this story.

P.S. You've been such a wonderful support so far with all your comments. I can't thank you enough. ^.^

Fri, April 17th, 2009 8:16am

BettyRawrs

i cryedddddddd nuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu omgggggggg so sad so she stays alone?

Fri, April 17th, 2009 8:00pm

Author
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It won't be that bad... Well, I guess she could go stay with Jun Xiong's Dad or find Uncle Philip. Thanks Betty! You've been so wonderful with your support. ^.^

Fri, April 17th, 2009 4:59pm

Jessica George

This story was wonderful!!! well put together! =^-^= i couldn't stop when I started xD GREAT JOB!

Fri, April 17th, 2009 10:51pm

Author
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Wow! You actually finished the whole novel at a go?! That's awesome! Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed this story. =D

Fri, April 17th, 2009 5:02pm

RogueHost

Naw I thought that this was going to end sadly with her being alone and not knowing the truth. But I'm so happy that it ended the way it did with her knowing the truth. This was really good and original. I can't wait to read more of your work :D

Sat, April 18th, 2009 1:55pm

Author
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Aww... Thanks! You've been such a great support so far! I love your comments so... so much! I'm happy you found this novel original. I'd spent a lot of time planning the plot before writing. I do hope to come up with better stories. I'll remember to update all other novels asap! =D

Sat, April 18th, 2009 11:34am

Art of Life

great ending!! finally know what's that special melody in the watch.. heheh.. love this story very much, well done =)

Sat, April 18th, 2009 4:35pm

Author
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Yes! You've got the most significant point about the watch. I'd started with the melody so I ended with it. Thanks for all of your comments thus far! Wonderful compliment I've received here. Thanks! ^.^

Sat, April 18th, 2009 11:39am

schatzi

I love, love, love this! Such a great ending! Sorry, I was reading the last chapters too fast to comment on each of them --- it was too good to stop! :)

Excellent work! Thanks for a great story!

Sat, April 18th, 2009 10:37pm

Author
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Thanks! It's alright about the comments. I'm happy you've been reading my novel. Most importantly, it's been wonderful to have received all of your encouragement & support! =D

Sun, April 19th, 2009 7:24am

Alice Clarence

I am crying now. I couldn't even listen to the whole song. It is so sweet that they'll be together again. Now she has a grandfather. It's so lovely. Sorry that i was so late in reading this.

Sun, April 19th, 2009 7:44pm

Author
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I'm glad you enjoyed this Alice. But they're not together anymore. Thanks for reading my novel thus far. I appreciate all of your comments ^.^

Sun, April 19th, 2009 5:10pm

DeathAngel

wow I'd die if I fell in love with my DAD it's got a bittersweet ending :)

Sun, April 19th, 2009 8:09pm

Author
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Me too! And yupz, the ending is definitely bittersweet. Thanks for reading my novel. =D

Sun, April 19th, 2009 5:11pm

babyjess95

that was spectacular... i was like, please dont let it be her brother but it's even worse. its her dad.

Mon, April 20th, 2009 4:13am

Author
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Yeah... I guessed it was pretty bold of me to write that. But I hoped you had enjoyed the novel. Thanks for all of your fabulous support so far. ^.^

Sun, April 19th, 2009 10:45pm

Midnight Rose

All I can say is that....WOW! You have left me speechless! What s beautiful. touching story! Kudos, my dear! :0)M- The winners of my challenge will be posted tomorrow!

Mon, April 20th, 2009 12:31pm

Author
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=D I am rather hopeful for this challenge..

Mon, April 20th, 2009 5:32pm

ah hiam

oh i love the story!! it has been a great comfort to follow through...looking forward to your other wonderful pieces!! well done fairy!!

Mon, April 20th, 2009 6:26pm

Author
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Aww... Thanks! It's been a great comfort to receive all of your lovely comments along the way too! Thank you so much ah hiam! ^.^

Mon, April 20th, 2009 5:20pm

BettyRawrs

nuuuu make a another part but now make her fall in love with a human not ghost she deserves to be happy :( rawrs!! ( not an offensive comment ) but i want her to be happy :) i hope you do another part i mena i really like your story but mara deserves to be happy :(

Mon, April 20th, 2009 10:04pm

Author
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Thanks Betty! I'm glad you wanted to read more about her. But I don't think I am going to continue with this story. Anyways, I just got to know that my story disqualifies for the challenge. So it makes me pretty sad as the author.

Mon, April 20th, 2009 5:10pm

Midnight Rose

Hey fairywings I apologize in reality I was the one to screw up you did it right I tell you again I am sorry! To me you're a winner! I really am sorry! Don't be disappointed or hurt i tell you and all of your fans that you are awesome and that your very first challenge was not a waste! One last Dance is magical, romantic, sad and ethereal! beautiful and touching! You are a master at what you do! I am so sorry and hope you will be my fan again! What can I do to make it up to you?

Tue, April 21st, 2009 11:25am

kitty98

Falling in love with dad... losing dad... finding out HIS your dad... it must have been sad for her when she puzzled that together.
Great story though never read anything like this before and trust me I read a lot.

Fri, April 24th, 2009 2:32pm

Author
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Woah... That's great! Yay! This means my work is original. ^.^ I'm all smiles here. Thanks for reading my entire novel at a go!

Fri, April 24th, 2009 5:18pm

yuu shindemura

*Claps* this was one intriguing and very very magical, it's very heartfelt! i think the ending speaks enough. no sequel needed---though yeah it's up to you to add.

but this story, yeah, very awesome, wonderful, the imagination of your mind and will to make the story alive has finally beat in the hearts of many people who has read it (though i find the kissing scene gross--no offence), and yes, the whole novel is a success, not really a challenge novel now, but a novel that comes from you: time, effort, energy, willpower, mind, and heart!!!

omedetoo gozaimasu!!! (congratulations) (and yes, glad that you're over your downed and upset feelings on it)
you're always the winner, jiahui-chan! the rankings can be kept for the people who won on midnight rose's challenge, but this novel stands tall and proud.

very much, i mean every word to this.^.^



sincerely commented,

-yuu shindemura


Mon, April 27th, 2009 2:55pm

Author
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WOW! This is just so WOW! FANTASTIC comment! I am really flattered by your kind words. I'm grateful to have such a wonderful reader as you! Thank you for enjoying this novel and yupz.. you might be right. Maybe I don't need a sequel. I am not surprised you found the kissing scene gross since he's her father. Lol... About the challenge? It doesn't matter anymore since my reader recognize me as the winner. ^.^ You have no idea how much this means to me. THANKS YUU!

Mon, April 27th, 2009 5:39pm

jennoria

*gasp* the ending came too soon!!! noo!!!!! there shoudl deffo be a seuel! lol!

*JeNnA*

Wed, April 29th, 2009 5:27am

Author
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Is it that soon?? Haha... I thought I'm pretty done here. LOL! Yupz... There's a possibility of a sequel. No promises though. >.< I'm really happy that you've finished this novel! Thanks for reading JeNnA! (P.S. I love all of your comments!)

Tue, April 28th, 2009 10:32pm

jennoria

yep, im that good! lol, jk! im not stck up! hehe. i try to keep my comments, well, me! hehe, not boring and all, know? thanks for introdcing me to this story! i rele like it:)

*JeNnA*

Wed, April 29th, 2009 5:36am

Author
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Aww... Thanks! Your comments are MOST DEFINITELY NOT BORING! Haha.. I've enjoyed reading your comments. Once again, thanks!

Tue, April 28th, 2009 10:40pm

angellynn

Your story Is all things wrapped Into one fantastic novel..It had suspence,sadness, laughter, excitement.. It has what It takes to keep the reader reading.. Awesome job! You should publish!!!! I'm not just saying that either.. It Is really good!

Angellynn :D

Thu, April 30th, 2009 12:21pm

Author
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Wow! You flatter me very much! Thank you for reading this and leaving me such a wonderful comment! ^.^ Publish? I don't think I can yet. But it's really great to hear that from you! =D

Thu, April 30th, 2009 5:51am

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