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Chapter 6 – Goodbye

Mara dashed into her bathroom. The water was scalding hot but that was what she needed to cleanse herself. Her body was dirty. She scrubbed all surface of herself with lots of soap and continued scrubbing under the boiling water. Her skin changed from flushed to bright red. The pink blotches left by Jake on her breasts had blended into the surrounding blistering patches of skin. She still wasn’t clean.

Nothing could get her innocence back. Mara collapsed onto the bathtub and wailed. “Mum! I want you! Take me with you!” She cried. But there was no response. Mara was alone.

“Please Mum! Why are you so cruel to your Mara? Do you hear me? Bring me to where you are right now.” Still, there was only the sound of water gurgling from the shower head.

She gave up. Mum can never hear me again.

Mara had decided. She was going to look for her father. There was no way she could stay and face that thief who had stolen her virginity. She would never mention his name again. Her hate for him was sufficient to conceive a murder plan. She was going to send him to hell before she leaves.

As Mara made her way towards the kitchen, she was stopped by her uncle as she crept past his room. “Mara, why aren’t you asleep? You couldn’t fall asleep?” Uncle Philip was concerned about her. She yearned for his care dearly.

“Uncle Philip!” She ran and hugged her uncle.

“Mara, is everything ok? Why are you crying? You’re missing your mother?” Worry lines creased his forehead.

Mara shook her head gently. Her mind was in a state of confusion. Should I tell Uncle Philip about his son? She kept questioning herself.

After a long pause, she looked in her uncle’s eyes. “Uncle Philip, do you love your son very much?” His answer mattered a lot to her as she waited.

“Yes of course I love Jake. He may be quite a disappointment but he is my flesh and blood. I can’t bring myself to blame him for his faults as his mother left him when he was born. All I have left of his mother is him – the result of our love.” He smiled at Mara.

“I am sure your mother loved you dearly. I promise you I would try my best to give you all the love I have although it may not mean as much to you as your mother’s love.” Uncle Philip added.

“No. It means a lot – so much more than you can imagine.” She collapsed in her uncle’s arms. How could she hurt him when he loved her so? She was unable to bring herself to kill his only son. She felt warmth in his embrace. No hatred could snatch this warmth away from her.

“Uncle Philip, I am going back to bed. Goodnight.” She kissed his cheek.

“Ok. Goodnight my princess.” He planted a kiss on her forehead and sauntered back to his room.

Goodbye Uncle Philip. Mara whispered as she left to pack up her belongings and left in the dark.

Submitted: March 31, 2009

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i just read all these chappies great story poor mara what a sad story cant wait to see what happens update soon :)

Tue, March 31st, 2009 9:39am


Wow! Thanks! It was so wonderful of you to read all of it so quickly. =D

Tue, March 31st, 2009 2:41am

Midnight Rose

Wow! You actually made me cry! This novel is great. Sort of hits home in a way- if you can catch my meaning. Great write! *smiles* M

Tue, March 31st, 2009 11:52am


Yay! Thank you! I hope my story managed to get you to feel what the protagonist is going through. ^.^

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:44pm


Jake is a bastard! he so deserves... well... to be raped himself, show him how disgusting he is. Good story though =D update soon

Tue, March 31st, 2009 12:39pm


Haha... Thats a good one. Its a pity I can't imagine him being raped by some other person. Thats a little to hard to write.

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:41pm


Noooo! That was sad :'( and very realistic. It's bad enough that she was raped! But by her own flesh and blood >:Z that's terrible. I'm just going to pretend that they're not blood related coz. It's worse to imagine that someone your related to would feel that way and act upon it. Good story at the moment. Tell me when u update. But u still have 2 update hidden beauty!

Tue, March 31st, 2009 1:24pm


I can understand. Its so much more twisted that they're related. Hee.. Thanks for the reminder. ^.^ I will update Hidden Beauty.

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:40pm

crystal aqua

JAKE CAN GO TO HELL!! but very well written. :] i'm anxiously awaiting the next updates. XD

Tue, March 31st, 2009 2:39pm


I won't let your wait be long. ^.^

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:30pm



Tue, March 31st, 2009 2:43pm


Haha... He deserves to go there. I'll update pretty soon. ^.^

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:28pm

Art of Life

very vivid descriptions, brought back memories (i mean the beginning..) keep it up! looking forward to the next chapters =)

Tue, March 31st, 2009 4:16pm


I'm sorry if I brought up sad memories. But thanks for your encouragement. I will be writing more.

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:27pm


very well written!!
Poor girl..*sniff*...
#$&*&%$%&* I agree with others! Jake can go to hell!!

Let me know when you update!^^

Tue, March 31st, 2009 4:21pm


Thanks! I will be sure to update you. ^.^

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:26pm

yuu shindemura

hey! it should be that mara told his uncle!

rawr! that's it!

"NIGHTFALL!! get jake!"

*Nightfall then goes to tear jake in a bloody scene*
hehe but no~~~~you're the storywritter so, "Nightfall, return to me!"

*walks away*

hehe lol, am just saying you should have make jake take the consequences!!!!!!!!!


Tue, March 31st, 2009 6:51pm


LOL! Go on! Send Nightfall. I don't mind.

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:16pm


excellent! jake is an a** bastard, and i hate him. But Mara is cool. excellent job, u made me cry! grrr. watev. update soon!

Tue, March 31st, 2009 7:22pm


Aww... I'm sorry. I didn't mean to make you cry. This may sounds saddist but I'm glad my story managed to do that.

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:16pm


That's it I am officially going to murder someone...even if he is a fictional character. Do you FEEL that, yup that's my anger and sadness and horror at what happened to her. Really realistic. Anyways, I thought it was good so let me know when you update.

Tue, March 31st, 2009 9:18pm


Yes I can SO feel it. That's what I went through while writing.

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:14pm


oh wow....That's harsh! She cant even tell him cause she wont cause that pain on him...that's a harsh feeling to have towards yourself afterwards!


Tue, March 31st, 2009 10:20pm


It is... Because I need to use the name Mara which means bitter in Hebrew for this challenge, I had to make circumstances pretty terrible for her.

Tue, March 31st, 2009 5:10pm


Wow! This is incredibly well written! I completely feel for Mara and her struggle. Please, please let me know when you update!

Wed, April 1st, 2009 3:45am


I am really flattered. Thanks! I will inform you once I update. ^.^

Tue, March 31st, 2009 10:03pm


=[ Poor Mara. I FEEL SOOOO BAD 4 HER!

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 11:18pm


Yupz... Worse thing is to keep it within herself so as not to hurt her uncle.

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 5:56pm


this is story is really good. your great writer.

Wed, April 8th, 2009 7:31am


Thanks! I am glad you're still reading on. ^.^

Wed, April 8th, 2009 12:36am


Mara, run!
jake, go to hell!!!!!!
uncle philip, open ur eyes!!!!!! cant you see the scum ur son is?!?!?! geez!!!!

... hehe, sorry for the course language.... ^_^


Sat, April 25th, 2009 11:39pm


Haha... It's alright. And yea... Jake is a scum!

Sun, April 26th, 2009 5:22pm

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