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Ethan has been pacing around the room thinking for the past hour.

I feel like he is starting to carry the parts of a heavy rock I have been bearing all this time.

But I also feel like I deserve to be carrying that rock alone.

“Ethan, what if I deserve this? What if the fact that I’m even in this room is my fault?” I ask, nervous.

“Look, I don’t know if this is your fault.” He starts. 

“It is my fault. All the things the whispers have been voicing out – they’re all referring to something I did in the past. Something that left the person hurt and alone.” I start to tremble.

I am beginning to feel weak.

I am beginning to realize how my life feels like a lie mixed with history.

“But you’re not that person anymore.” Ethan shrugs.

“You’re not the monster of your past. He erased everything that was you, and now you have a chance to be a better person – if you were not one back then.”

“No, what if my deeds are unforgivable? What if they’re so evil that -“ I begin.

“I believe in who you are. You’re innocent, Noah. You don’t even know your parents. And, believe me; it’s all because of the person who put us in here. It’s not a fair way of revenge. It’s not just when you don’t know you did that. It could’ve been someone else, for God’s sake.” Ethan replies.

I understand why he is here now.

Whatever he has been saying in the amount of time he has been in here, it is leaving me with hope.

Every time he creates hope in me, I feel like I’m a mistake at the same time.

I feel like a white color pencil on a piece of paper.

 The hope that I am given feels like my role as that pencil changes into a role as a multi-color one for a few seconds.

Then it all crashes down as white.

“Ethan, you’re not supposed to be here.” I speak as I swallow the lump of pain in my throat.

“I know why I am here, Noah. If not for me, you’ll be stuck here forever.” Ethan says.

“You don’t know that. I am wise enough to think a way out of here.” I object.

“That’s not what I meant. You know how to get out of here. But if I didn’t tell you that you could do it, you wouldn’t have even tried.” He stares at me.

Look at the tire and pain in her eyes. This is marvelous, wonderful.

I wish I could take the boy out for a while.

If I did, I could watch her cry as we tell her he is going to die. But he won’t.

“This person is mad. All I can see in your eyes is need for freedom.” He sighs.

“Actually, I’m desperate right now. I’m desperate for safety.” I laugh.

“That’s nothing to laugh about, Noah.” He shakes his head.

“It’s going to be okay in the end, right?” I ask. Ethan does not reply.

“Ethan, tell me it’s going to be okay.”

“It’s not going to be okay. It’s going to be just right.” He assures me.

For a second, I see a warrior in him and I am sure he sees the same in me.

“We’re in this together.” I state and lean back.

“Forever.” He agrees and looks past the walls like he sees the sky.

I whisper his agreement again and fall asleep slowly.

I try to imagine my definition of the world around me.

When I ignore those dull walls, I see the universe. It is beautiful in a way I wish everyone was.

The sky, the sun, the people, the calm water, the music, the feeling and smell of rain, the –

“Noah, wake up.” Ethan shakes me awake and hands me an Energy bar once I am.

It probably has been hours since we had our moment of hope.

“This world is interesting.” I smile.

“So, you’ve been thinking about it, too.” Ethan looks impressed.

It hits me that he has not smiled.

“Yeah, the people. They are curious in different ways. The way they live makes me wonder.” I nod.

I wonder how hard it is for him to be in here.

“I remember.” Ethan suddenly blurts out. I turn to him.

“I remember, Noah. I remember my parents and how they felt when I was brought here.”

“But, most importantly, I remember you being there.”

“I was – I was there?” I ask.

“You were. I saw you.” He replies, coldly.

I sigh and sit down on the hard floor.

I must know who gave the boy details.

Whoever did deserves an increased payment. *laughter*

Noah King does not have a chance against me.

“Noah King. I like my name.” I smile.

“I have a feeling I have something to do with that name.” Ethan says. I look at him to see beads of sweat running down his face.

“Are you alright, Ethan?” I begin to feel worried.

“Something…something is wrong with me. Please just stay away for a while.” He pleads. I simply stare through.

A bang on the door causes me to draw my feet towards myself.

I am afraid.

I fear what lurks outside. I realize that I fear the world.

“What was that?” He asks. He looks exhausted.

“I don’t know, Ethan. I don’t want to know.” I say and my voice shakes.

“We need to get out of here as soon as we can. This place can change us.” He says and stands up.

“Yes, well it’s about time we came to that decision.” I tap the wall next to me.

They’re coming for you, little Noah.

They can’t see the difference between angel and demon.

They’re coming for you, little King.

They don’t mind whether you’re going to hell or heaven.

My mind flickers to the thought of a memory.

The setting is tragic – black and white. I am amidst the trees of the woods, amidst the drops of rain.

But I am not alone.

There is someone else here – and he has fallen on the ground.

The color of blood paints his face. He is looking at me with an expression that screams for help.

I feel my lips twist into a smile. Ruthless.

“They’re coming for you, little Joan.

They can’t see the difference between angel and demon.

They’re coming for you, little Parker.

They don’t mind whether you’re going to hell or heaven.”

“Noah, it is not entirely my fault your sister is not alive. Please forgive me.”

“You are someone I can’t forgive. But, you can try and reason with them.”

“Noah, please don’t. I am so sorry.”

“They don’t have the word for an apology in their dictionary, Joan. They are coming for you.”

I leave Joan Parker alone.

And I maintain a safe distance from where he stands.

Shadows whirl around him and he collapses onto the ground clutching his ears.

They are screaming.

The memory fades and I see Ethan standing before me. He is studying me.

“I heard all of that.” Ethan states.

“Ethan, I won’t do any of that ever again. Don’t hate me.” I quickly apologize.

I am a monster.

I do not doubt the phrase anymore.

“I will never hate you. I don’t understand why you think I would.” Ethan smirks.

I am surprised that he has shown a sign of joy or amusement.

“But I left him there to die. I left Joan Parker to his death.” I reply.

“Noah, he’s still alive now. That’s what matters. He escaped them.” He insists.

“But, I could leave you to them any moment. I may be completely out of my mind.” I exclaim.

“You are not following me.” He sighs. “He killed your sister.”

I process those four words. I have a sister.

No, I had a sister.

Parker killed my sister. I look up at Ethan.

“So I was taking revenge.” I say.

“Of course you were. You were trying to make him pay for the loss of your sibling.” Ethan says.

“That also means the revenge was balanced when you left him to them.”

I narrow my eyes. “But now it’s not.”

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


Submitted: July 11, 2015

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Evelyn Mason

Thisnis so intriguing but I do havea question. This may sound complicated but it seems like they know who has them locked up. Do they know? If they do then I think you might want to explain a little more or give more detail as to what they are talking about. If they DON'T know who it is then you might want to make their confusion a little apparent. I hope this makes sense :) anyway, I still like it, keep me updated!

Sun, July 12th, 2015 4:22am

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Well, yes, this is an answerable question right now. What Noah and Ethan know is that they have been locked up for quite some time now and they assume the person who's been whispering to them is the one who has captivated them: Joan Parker. That's only what they assume, and he provides them with memories like the one you've read. But, the answer to whether or not he really is the captivator and whether he really killed the sister will not be revealed in the comments. So, ultimately, they have assumed their locker, but they are only confused as to why they have been locked up. Thank you!

Sat, July 11th, 2015 10:01pm

H. Adams

I don't have anything to say. Like, I'm fully invested. Please let me know on my page when you post the next chapter (no rush). Just... good job. Very very good job.

Sun, July 12th, 2015 5:38am

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I really, really, want to post the next chapters (almost as much as you do), but I'm just absent-mindedly waiting for more people to read. But, they're not...

Sat, July 11th, 2015 10:39pm

Jack Motley

Yes, Ethan, yesss... Talk about yourself in the third-person, as if you're not the voice in Noah's head, trapped in there with her.

Earn her trust and love. Wait for the moment of absolute faith, trust and devotion, THEN. RIP. HER. HEART. OUT. Revenge!

Thu, July 16th, 2015 3:40am

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Thu, July 16th, 2015 1:40am

LeParadisNoirPoetique

For your age you are an incredible writer. You have kept Noah and Ethan so close, and it is tender. I love how Noah is trying to fight the monsters of the past, and Ethan is trying to convince her that they are gone, and did what they did as an act of revenge. It is a stunning description of Noah being tormented, and doubting herself, while Ethan is being the rock to keep them sane.
The characters are the opposite of each other, but also the contrast of each other, and how you describe the surroundings they are in is beautiful. I love the mention of black and white, describing the setting as tragic. Noah believes she is a monster, and Ethan assuring her that what she did is the equal to what Joan deserved. Compelling and beautiful to read.

Mon, July 20th, 2015 1:37pm

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I am so honored. All of your comments have got me thinking: am I really incredible for my age? Thank you so very much. I do like to keep them as contrasting as possible, yet the same. Thank you!

Mon, July 20th, 2015 6:44am

Obscure

I'm impressed, you've maintained the interest really well. Again, there was a great amount of mystery, now with added concepts for the readers to digest and speculate on. Your writing is at a good standard, though personally I would like to see a little more description; but I understand that's hard to do when the setting so far is in an empty room. My main concern with your writing is regarding confusion, I think at times you could be somewhat clearer; remember that what may be intentional to you can appear accidently vague to your reader. Obviously, you want to hide information to keep intruige, but ensure the reader is not left so in the dark they don't' know what's going on. So far, I don't think that's happened, I would just suggest playing around with your writing and trying to find a good balance. There's a great amount of conflict here, what with Noah being trapped with a stranger that appears to know more than he let's on, the voices and Noah's past/guilt. Dialogue is good,very real most of the time, though they do speak a bit similar, however the things they say and the emotions they show usually distinguishes them. Sometimes they say things that appear irrelevant? "You don't even know your parents." and "It's not just when you don't know you did that." - also, this sentence is rather awkward. I also think sometimes your dialogue tags are unnecessary and slow the pace of the story. ' "Look, I don't know if this is your fault," he starts. I interrupt him instead.' I don't think anything after the dialogue is needed, better to be direct, "I interrupt him instead" sounds like a stage direction, I'd suggest just having Noah interrupt him, her dialogue is enough to show it happening. I love the voices, it adds a great dynamic to the novel, and I liked the flashback with Joan, and how when Noah was avenging her sister she sounded like a completely different person, cold and calculating, compared to now when she says things like "Don't hate me!" Can't wait till she gets out of the room, I want to see what the world outside is like just as much as she does, and as of yet a setting hasn't really been established. Look forward to chapter 3 :)

Sat, July 25th, 2015 11:48pm

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Yay, I like impressing people with my work. Really, my novel revolves around making the reader think and wonder about what's coming next. It is very essential for my story. I assure you I'll be clearer with my new chapters. Noah and Ethan are two versions of one. That's what I can let you know. "You don't even know your parents" is said to acknowledge the fact that Noah doesn't know the things that are greatly important in her life, so she cannot assume that whatever the whispers are telling her as the truth. "It's not just when you don't know you do that" - here, the just is used in relation to justice, not the literal meaning. The only thing I'm not able to understand is your query about dialogue tags. I've made the changes regarding the interruption. Yeah, the flashbacks are actually quite dramatic..do read the next chapter!

Sat, July 25th, 2015 9:25pm

Kaito Shiba

This chapter is amazing! It adds much more depth to the story, and the plot becomes much more intriguing! Noah seems very very real, fighting the monsters in their past! I'm not sure what to make of Ethan though... Why doesn't he hear his own past too? Anyway, amazing work!

Sun, August 2nd, 2015 3:43pm

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Thank you is all I have to say. Otherwise, spoilers.

Mon, August 3rd, 2015 2:22am

Josephic

Uhmmm "by four brick walls with NO DOORS or windows." now "A bang on the DOOR" this is getting more interesting, so they might be a possibility that there is more to this chamber than is presently seen by Noah and Ethan (hmmm, wonder what they are going to discover next oh maybe a secret passage way that leads to a room made of gummy bears ^_^ hmmmm, yum-yum... Just playing 'round). New entities coming in: a sister, Joan Parker (the for NOW murderer of Noah's sister) and the "THEY" people/ beings? Whatever... Another "goofy" comment from Joe sorry 'bout that(this) though ^_^ and also about the delay I've been busy lately trying to escape from myself and some other lame stuffs, this is a very interesting and intelligently formed (forming?) novel will make sure to keep reading... Thanks a lot.

Thu, November 12th, 2015 2:43am

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Let me just say that your comments are fairly interesting to read. *grins* Did I really say 'a bang on the door'? Because that would be a major mistake that I oversaw. Anyways, keep guessing and I'm hoping my 'very interesting and intelligently forming novel' will keep you hanging till the end. Thank YOU, Joe.

Tue, November 17th, 2015 2:21am

Josephic

Uhmmm "by four brick walls with NO DOORS or windows." now "A bang on the DOOR" this is getting more interesting, so they might be a possibility that there is more to this chamber than is presently seen by Noah and Ethan (hmmm, wonder what they are going to discover next oh maybe a secret passage way that leads to a room made of gummy bears ^_^ hmmmm, yum-yum... Just playing 'round). New entities coming in: a sister, Joan Parker (the for NOW murderer of Noah's sister) and the "THEY" people/ beings? Whatever... Another "goofy" comment from Joe sorry 'bout that(this) though ^_^ and also about the delay I've been busy lately trying to escape from myself and some other lame stuffs, this is a very interesting and intelligently formed (forming?) novel will make sure to keep reading... Thanks a lot.

Thu, November 12th, 2015 2:43am

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