The Violinist
He touches me,
An ache runs across my being
I feel him at an ethereal level
When he transfigures his soul
Into strains of divine music
The music that passes through me
Its each note is ecstasy
I lie inert, my each atom vibrates
At this very moment, he leaves me alone
Alive yet insensate, in another insistent wait.
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So here I am:
Beloved and ignored, visible yet invisible
Fused yet apart, apart yet inseparable
Ahhh! I am love's total surrender
Dead and alive at his command
He is my enigma, the light of my heart
I am his little secret, the jewel of his arm
Lying end to end, from shoulder to wrist
I am his violin.... he is my violinist.
http://www.booksie.com/violin
Submitted: May 29, 2012
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now come on ... you know this is not my type of poem
and your making me liking it
:-)
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tell me.. whats your type of poem... i win, i win, i made you like it.. what an offence, now catch me if you can...
Wed, May 30th, 2012 11:03am
i like it so much..
eyy great job portraying the violin..
i like the fact that you gave the violin a feeling..
i like the idea..
you did a wonderful job
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:) thanks...
Wed, May 30th, 2012 11:01am
Yes, i like it. Lovely written.
Tue, May 29th, 2012 6:43pm
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Thank you :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 11:00am
Wow! Wonderful. As if violins could talk, and who's to say that they don't.
Tue, May 29th, 2012 6:51pm
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:)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 10:59am
This is really good! I loved the phrase, 'Fused and apart, apart and inseperable.' I'm a huge doer for figurative language!
Tue, May 29th, 2012 7:19pm
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oh yes yes... this line is true.. thank you so much :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 10:59am
Very nice poem! Really made the violin come to life! Very enjoyable poem.
Tue, May 29th, 2012 7:25pm
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Thank you :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 10:57am
Absolutly lovely! You write with such emotion, I love it. I can see why this is your all time favorite!
Tue, May 29th, 2012 7:49pm
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:)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 10:56am
Cool poem. :) It's very well written. Good job.
Tue, May 29th, 2012 7:58pm
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Thank you :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 10:56am
Sometimes I go to a page and find poetry, or I find just art. Occasionally, I go to apoem which is much much more. Occasionally, I find a piece which influences me to push my own art and writing even further. This piece goes above and beyond! It is elegant, it is art, and it is a rock solid masterpiece! I really like this piece!
Tue, May 29th, 2012 8:59pm
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Thank you J, though i dont like to indulge in self praise but this one is really a piece in a million,,, if somebody else had written it, i would be red in envy (not a usual habit) come on how someone can write like this except in heat of passion... i am trying to recall the moments when it was written,, i used to be a bit different back then, i didnt have patience at that time...
Wed, May 30th, 2012 10:47am
wow this is wonderful .... its like as if the violin is speaking out its feelings then again I am forced to think if a person is likening herself to a violin and her lover as a violinist ... but really good job :)
Tue, May 29th, 2012 9:06pm
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well, to clarify it, it is certainly a person hiding behind the symbol of violin... thanks dear!
Wed, May 30th, 2012 10:42am
I love the whole idea of a violin :) And, again, the word 'ecstasy', I just love. I don't know why :D Love it!! KMU!! >.
Tue, May 29th, 2012 9:06pm
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who can dislike that word.. very lovable,, thanks dear!
Wed, May 30th, 2012 10:40am
Quite a lovely story! Your writing is gorgeous as always :)
I do hope you get to be a professional! I would be one of the first to buy your book!! I love it! KEEP WRITING!!!
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Thank you dear,,, yeah, someday...
omg i must decide on a pen name less saucy than guilty pleasure... cant use my own name,,, my friends think i am totally emotionless and i have convinced them that i have no hormones either... hahah as the suggestion of becoming professional keeps coming, only funny things come to my mind.. first thing everybody would ask me... who is the violinist (honor his anonymity please, he likes it this way and very reasonably too),, and some will have a heart break (no big deal, cant do much on that) so this book of Pandora is a fun project to imagine and to start with...
PS: Thanks for all the encouragement, i will take it seriously :)
The passion and almost raw emotion in this poem blew me away. It seemed like there were so many levels to this poem, from what meets the eyes to something much much deeper. Very well done.
Tue, May 29th, 2012 10:21pm
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:) :) i agree and i love your comment :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 3:58am
Reread and still undecided... it could go either way.. your lover is playing your emotions as if music.... you are the violin. Or quite literally a violinist playing encapsulating and mesmerizing music
... either way I love it. Great job!
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yes, thats the right conclusion- "it can go either way." but all good poetry is supposed to be figurative... so violin is there but it is still a metaphor of its meaning... this you have to decide whats more important- the symbol or its essence, actually one cannot BE without the other, so it is the synthesis of the two finally that makes it a poem.
i think i am successful in confusing the things further;)
Thanks for being here :)
I really like this one a lot. I'm really not into poems, but I might take a sudden interest to them because of you. My best friend plays the violin, she'll love this a lot. :)
~Kenzie.
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That means a lot to me... thanks :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 3:51am
This is like a love story and devoted apostle all rolled into one nice work.
Tue, May 29th, 2012 11:27pm
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wow... thank you for the great comment :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 3:48am
ilove the way you compare her love and feelings for this man to the playing of a violin! a very sweet poem.LOVE IT.
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Aww.. thank you so much,,, you were pretty direct in saying that, liked!!! :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 3:47am
Wow!! Damnit your poems are too good. I love each one more than the last. And the fact that you can write from a violin's point of view just shows you're good. you can write about anything. keep them poems coming x
Wed, May 30th, 2012 2:08am
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OMG.. perhaps i can write about anything except negativity and hopelessness! Thank you so much :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 3:45am
Lovely poem. Oxymoron used in second phase of the poem is the beauty of this poem. Thanks again for the reading invitation.
Wed, May 30th, 2012 3:13am
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Thank You :)
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Another great poem... will have to re-read it to see if it is figurative or literal...
Tue, May 29th, 2012 6:03pmAuthor
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figurative :)
Wed, May 30th, 2012 11:10am