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A poem entailing a woman's suffering after losing his love...

My prison
This surreal enclosure overburdens my soul
As the crowd strides by, they loathe me
My outstretched hands of desperation
are ignored and taken as deceit
When the footprints are all that remains
I stare at the moon
Hoping he’d realize how the soles of my feet ache to be graced
By the light of the darkness
The rare soul amongst the tainted
Can he not see that my soul is the same?
It shines through that darkness
and although masked frequently by clouds of emotion
It returns to the clearing, shining as bright as ever
If only he could see past my rough exterior
and gaze into my heart like a crystal ball...
But my confusion has stolen his trust and his love
and placed him to pass by me
Along with the remainder of the crowd
Leaving me to dry my tears with my naked arms
and lie bare, shivering on a steel spotlight
As another deformity of nature

Submitted: November 25, 2009

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angellynn

This is a sad and deep poem. The kind of writing I truly enjoy reading. I'm not a depressed person. I just think they have so much meaning in them. The kind of emotions that come deep from the soul. If that makes sense to you? Lol! Thanks! I loved it.
Angellynn:)

Wed, November 25th, 2009 2:56am

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As a writer, I tap into the emotions of a character create. Sometimes I make up a story, throw someone in it, then write how they would feel.
Music helps me tap into their feelings.
I've felt somewhat that way before though.

Tue, November 24th, 2009 6:59pm

livelovelearn

Amazing.

Wed, November 25th, 2009 3:19am

rbergeso

"Shivering on a steel spotlight" is visceral and smooth, a really great line. I like a lot in this poem, and I don't feel justified to criticize constructively.

Wed, November 25th, 2009 4:21am

Vincey Delaney

Wow, this is so beautiful and at the same time, very sad, almost dismal too. You are truly descriptive!!! This warmly touched my heart, thanks for that!! Anyways, I have a new Christmas story and poem. Please check it out. Thanks, be in touch!!!!

Sat, November 28th, 2009 4:23pm

Vinny9

Oh my! You are a great writer, and I am glad that I found you on Booksie! Not sounding like a stalker or anything....Keep it up, you insprie me to write as well!

Mon, December 21st, 2009 7:03pm

ddog880

wow this is just truley amazing story i have one question though. so u dont write on life expirences?
-if u want check out sum of my poems they may not be the best but theyre sumthing-

Wed, January 6th, 2010 4:13am