Just wrote this one night after having a huge fight with my girl which ended up in her letting me go...

We have just broken up and I do not know what to do

My head is spinning with all these thoughts of you,

It’s a long way the two of us have come

Better days we have seen but it seems you recall none,


I lay here in bed listening to the rain

The angels are crying because my heart is in pain,

My dreams have been shattered and there is a hole in my chest

How will I tonight put my mind to rest?


I try and I try searching for ways to get you back

But I am so unstable I keep falling off track,

I really do want this more than you know

I’m begging for you to stay and not let me go,


I have no idea how life without you will be

I always seen a future with you and me,

Now this dream has sadly come to an end

All alone with a heart only one person can mend,


It’s like my world has fallen and there is no hope

A life now without you, how will I cope?

The way that I’m feeling I cannot really explain

A part of you is missing but my love will remain.



Submitted: October 06, 2013

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good poem bud,very similar to some of my own.
i think the last line should read, a part of ME is missing. its not a criticism just an observation,,good job.

Sun, October 6th, 2013 7:54pm


I agree with daddy it should be 'part of me' x) And hey great poem I've been through a heartbreak with my first love and heck it was terrible... but things get better so don't be so down :)

Mon, October 7th, 2013 6:13am


well done. you've conveyed the feeling well. thanks for sharing :) p.s line 14...should that be "I've" instead of "I"?

Fri, October 11th, 2013 6:33pm


Thanks guys... I'm new to this so still learning,
but thanks for the tips. Appreciate it. :)

Tue, October 15th, 2013 10:07pm

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