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Ch.1 Rude Introductions

I?’ve always been told to strive for the best. But what if the best is not what you want or need? Lately I’ve been asking myself that question, but I can’t seem to have an answer to it. Everything I do is based off my future benefits, and sometimes I forget to live my life just to live it. I’m in my schools tennis team, debate team, chess team, the environmental club, and even in my school’s rotary club. And on top of that I’m in all A.P classes. I have the perfect boyfriend who’s in the football team, and that I just can’t get enough of. I thought that I had my life all planned out but all it took to change that was one guy.

“So are you going to the Jr. Luau party?” asked my best friend Michelle. She was a bit shorter than me with dark curly hair.

“You mean the one that’s in three weeks?” I asked absent mindedly as I swung my white racket back and fourth. Practice was finally over and after being scolded for the growing tension between the team, our coach let us go at 5:30.

“That’s the only Jr. Luau we‘re having.” She responded with a chuckle. We were heading to the girls locker for a quick change, thankful that today was Friday.

“Yeah…right. Well Jake hasn’t asked me yet”

“But he is. He absolutely in love with you” she said making me blush.

“Michelle, please” I said. Jake was an amazing guy, great looks, athletic, smart, and kind. And it’s true he loves me as much as I love him, we’d been together for about six months now and the relationship had been ideal.

After Michelle and I changed into our regular clothing she left home while I went over to the bleachers to wait for Jake, I always wait for him after practice, unless I have to do something else. I sat down and waited for about 5 minutes until Jake started running my way, his golden brown hair blowing in the air. I quickly stood up and met him half way, his arms open for me and greeted me with a loving embrace. I could feel his muscles through his jersey and I could smell his sweat drip--a little disgusting but cute all at the same time--and kissed him in the mouth.

“Hello babe” he chirped in my ear.

“Hi Jake” I never really liked calling him babe, honey, cupcake, or any other cheesy name like that and he knew it.

“Honey, I won’t be able to give you a ride today, coach said we’ll be staying for another hour”

“That’s alright, I’ll just walk” I told him.

“Are you sure?”

“Keller! Here now!” His coach screamed.

“Yeah, I’m sure . Now get back over there before your coach gets mad at you” I told him

“Bye” he said and left but not before stealing a kiss from me. He ran across the field and started his drills, while I gathered my stuff from the bleachers and started leaving.

As I was walking down the street I realized that today there was a new episode of Degrassi starting soon and I couldn’t afford to miss it. I started speeding up and without thinking I crossed the street without turning to look both ways. Next thing I know I heard a screeching sound coming from in front of me and I stopped dead in my tracks to face the car before me. I didn’t move or say anything I just stood and stare. The guy driving came out of his car looking furious and yelled.

“What the fuck are you doing!? Are you trying to get yourself killed!?” This stranger was very hot, he was tall, had black hair, and wore a black leather jacket. I realized that he went to my school, and I’d seen him on occasion but I never talked to him because he wasn’t my type of crowd.

“Uhm, I… I” I stuttered finally breaking my silence and looking down to the floor. “ I wasn’t thinking”

“To hell you weren’t”

“Sorry okay! I didn’t mean to cross the street like that” I yelled back. We were both standing in the middle of the road just yelling like a bunch of maniacs.

“What if I had run you over, you know what would happen to me! I could go to jail!”

“Like I give a shit what happens to you!” Wow, I should stop this, I’m becoming a tad bit rude.

“Just forget it alright little princess”

“Fuck you” I told him as he got into his car and sped off. Instead of thinking about how much I hated that douche bag right now, I couldn’t help but to think about how hot he was in that jacket. I just hope that he’s not a problem for me in the future.

Submitted: August 08, 2009

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Phoebe Gardens

Ooohhh! You're blurb got me addicted!!! I love her character-she's so perfect that she's waiting to be broken down, by dundundun-Kyle! I love that name btw! Also, sorry, I'm writing this comment and reading as I go along, what is an AP class? I'm Englsih so forgive me.
Ooohh! If that was Kyle-I love him already-he's hot and also got this rudeness about him, which can be changed by dundundun-Steph! Haha!
Oh he is going to be a big problem!!! Loving it! Please keep me updated!!!

Sat, August 8th, 2009 6:27am


I love the name Kyle too! Thats why i used it LOL oh and A.P means advanced placement, she's supposed to be really smart. Yeah Kyle is rude but he might change, either for the better or worse. I'm glad you like Kyle:] thanks for reading!!

Sat, August 8th, 2009 12:09am

Swirly me

Wow... that is one word i can give for it right now... Very very nice... cant wait for more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *PLEASE DO READ MY STORY, CINDERELLA AND DEAR DIARY... thank you!

Sat, August 8th, 2009 8:23am


Thank you:] I'm really trying hard to make it more interesting! I'll read your story as soon as I can!

Sat, August 8th, 2009 8:31am


Nicee :) Yesterday I almost got hit by a car too! I'm gonna read more too!

Sat, August 8th, 2009 9:24pm


LOL i hope you're okay! haha thanks for reading:]

Sat, August 8th, 2009 2:30pm


That's it.
I'm hooked.
This is amazing start to the novel, monicastar. :]

Sat, August 8th, 2009 10:35pm


thank you so much! i really appreciate it:]

Sat, August 8th, 2009 4:06pm

Lady Leah

I loved this so far, its great you have a few sentance structures that are a bit wrong, but I doubt anyone notied just me... sorry!
Haha, I love the sound of, *Kyle?* I think, I don't like the sound of her perfect boyfriend though, thats just me, I like to do for the guys that are less that perfect, haha I'm weird!

Great read, no spelling errors, and a great introduction to your story!

Keep posting those chapters!


~Lady Leah~

Sun, August 9th, 2009 7:04am


Thanks so much! i need to work on those errors, i noticed the somethings don't go but i'll get to them later hehe. yeah people love Kyle:]

Sun, August 9th, 2009 12:12am


I'm glad you asked me to read this story! It's really great, the plot is all exciting and it's only the first chapter. I must say your writing style is very good to0 and I was able to read it so casually and understand every thing that was going on.
Hmm. Keep me updated please and do hurry.
I can't help to feel a bit sad though that well maybe Jake and her won't make it and he sounds so nice. Oh well never judge at first impression. I like Kyle too that bad boy attitude.
Ahh I guess this is long.
Ok so I should shut up now but do keep me updated.

Mon, August 31st, 2009 5:37pm


i'm happy to hear that you enjoyed it! i wasn't able to update sooner because my computer had a virus but now that it's fixed i think i can post the next chapter:] Jake is very nice, and kyle is very daring, i guess you'll have read to see what happens between them (like my tease? LOL)I'll keep you updated and thanks for reading:]

Mon, August 31st, 2009 5:50pm


Amazing!:) I am so glad you asked me to read this story, the stranger sounds hot and her boyfriend seems nice, but IDK. I like the story so far though, very interestign and very addictive already. I gave it an "I like It" vote:) Oh and Degrassi? LOVE that show.:) Anyways, good job, please keep me updated, and Im off to the next chapter!:)

xoxo midnight

Tue, September 1st, 2009 4:36pm


I'm glad to hear that! I'm afraid of asking people to read it because some people get very annoyed by it LOL I love degrassi I knew I had to include it somewhere! Well thanks for reading:]

Tue, September 1st, 2009 10:24am


Ahh great start! I predict the future..of lots of flirting and teasing :) Kyle sounds delicious LOL.

You can keep me updated!

Mon, September 28th, 2009 3:06am


Yep, maybe even more than the friendly flirting;) things can get heated! thanks for reading and I'll keep you updated!

Sun, September 27th, 2009 8:28pm


Wow,so glad you asked me to read this! I'm hooked. Literally. I agree with carriebell, you have a great writing style that reallly makes the story flow. Please let me know when you update!

Tue, September 29th, 2009 4:13am


Yay! I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! Thanks, I'm trying to better my writting because sometimes I feel like I need work, and I do. Thanks for reading:]

Mon, September 28th, 2009 9:24pm


sounds good... i like the way they met...

Tue, September 29th, 2009 9:42pm


Thanks, I was trying to make their first encounter very obnoxious. Hopefully he cam across that way! LOL thanks for reading:]

Tue, September 29th, 2009 6:34pm


okay..why i would find that whole yelling scene totaly hot is beyond me...

i like the fact that all she thought about was how hot he looked in his jacket even while she cursed him out lol

Anyway off to read more!

Sun, November 29th, 2009 9:55pm


Haha I thought it was hot too LOL if I was her that would be what I would be thinking about!! I love guys in leather jackets, but that's just me. Thanks for reading:]

Sun, November 29th, 2009 2:17pm


Haha, hot jerks are always a good idea. :D

I really like it so far, stories that start off with perfection often don't stay that way. I'm definitely eager to read on. :)

Thu, December 31st, 2009 12:55am


haha so true:P Aww thanks but I have to say, this is the most suckish of the three stories I have up. Thanks for reading!

Wed, December 30th, 2009 5:59pm

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