DREAMS CANNOT BE FORCED

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

give in

when sleep unfolds in all of us

and eyelids slowly glide
there is no map into this nap
and no one there to guide
 
the land's of strange topography
mysterious in lines
the inner world that gets unfurled
is not of your designs
 
the tapestry's unraveling
you quickly lose the thread
as you've discerned the lesson, learned
it changes in your head
 
when you're upon this merry path
no patterns can you heed
your mental trials are cryptic files
that tell you what you need
 
your body may be fast asleep
but fast awake, your mind
and as you run into the sun
your shadow's left behind
 
you're just an actor on a stage
reality's divorced
so just dive in and take a spin
for dreams cannot be forced
 


Submitted: December 05, 2012

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dibbledabble

Nicely dreamed up poem. As always enjoyed

Dibs

Wed, December 5th, 2012 6:12am

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thanks Dibs....about ready to start dreaming as i type :) - alvin

Tue, December 4th, 2012 10:39pm

meenakshi sharma

niceyyy .. true dreams cant be forced. :)

Wed, December 5th, 2012 1:21pm

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thanks so much meenakshi :) - alvin

Wed, December 5th, 2012 10:33am

Ava Rosien

The best discription of dreams I've ever heard!

Well done alvin. :)

Wed, December 5th, 2012 11:14pm

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thanks Ava...i appreciate your time and comments :) - alvin

Wed, December 5th, 2012 8:58pm

wallaceb45

Great piece! check out some of my short stories!

Fri, December 21st, 2012 8:54pm

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i will...thanks Wallace - alvin

Fri, December 21st, 2012 9:08pm

clintleroy

"reality's divorced"... A small phrase and word to describe u.s.a.

Fri, December 21st, 2012 9:39pm

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so true - alvin

Fri, December 21st, 2012 9:10pm

Sultry Alice

Brilliant and entertaining as always! Your poetry, like yourself, simply beautiful.

Thanks

Gratz on making the front page!

Fri, December 21st, 2012 11:37pm

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oh crap, i did ?...i had no idea...thanks Alice :) - alvin

Fri, December 21st, 2012 9:11pm

Ben A Vanguarde

A nice, lucid exploration into the world of dreams. We can't be held accountable for our dreams, can we?

Sat, December 22nd, 2012 12:31pm

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nope, and that's the beauty of it. thanks Ben :) - alvin

Sat, December 22nd, 2012 8:46pm

Desilu

You expressed dreams perfectly.
Excellent writing,as always.
Dee.

Sat, December 22nd, 2012 4:42pm

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thanks so much, Dee...glad you enjoyed :) - alvin

Sat, December 22nd, 2012 8:48pm

JBrewer

Well written and a great read. Loved it.

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 7:29am

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thanks J :) - alvin

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 9:42pm

Nocturnal Writer

Love it. I don't know what else to write that hasn't already been written above but this is really well written, it's fun to read and keeps the same image of a dream. Love it and again KMU!

ps Gave it a like vote

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 12:35pm

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thanks so much MS....glad ya dug it :) - alvin

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 9:43pm

Christian Taylor

Beautifully written! Love it!!!

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 3:11pm

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thanks for your kind words, Christian :) - alvin

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 9:44pm

Maria Linda

Fantastic rhyme,rhythm and flow. I've been always fascinated with poems such as this.
And so, i've been striving as well to make my poems that way. But i am way too far behind your skills haha! You might want to check out my work and i'd appreciate some good advice from your caliber:-)
Way to write!

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 8:17pm

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thanks Maria, i will take a look :) - alvin

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 9:45pm

glitter snow426

oh wow, awesome work, marvellous very different and TRULY SPECIAL, GREAT!

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 10:57pm

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thanks for your time and kind comments :) - alvin

Sun, December 23rd, 2012 9:44pm

tainted innocence

amazing loved it, feels like i just woke up:):)

Mon, December 24th, 2012 1:47pm

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that's the idea....thanks so much :) - alvin

Mon, December 24th, 2012 3:51pm

air

Very Nicely done! And Congrats to making it on the front page!
Merry Christmas ?

Mon, December 24th, 2012 7:01pm

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thanks so much...i was very surprised :) - alvin

Mon, December 24th, 2012 3:51pm

zainul

Great write
Enjoyed reading

Tue, December 25th, 2012 4:19am

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thanks so much :) - alvin

Mon, December 24th, 2012 10:02pm

Miss A

noticed your poem on the homepage and hence came by to read ..and I have to say its a very nice read ...and I love the last stanza .. congrats on featuring on the Booksie homepage .. its worth it .. :)

Wed, December 26th, 2012 11:20am

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thanks so much Miss A, so glad you enjoyed :) - alvin

Wed, December 26th, 2012 1:15pm

poijhhffbcdghffhgth

The politics of booksie got this poem on the front page. Otherwise it wouldn't have never been the readers choice. So many better poems than this. There's no interesting point in this poem. People here need to voice their opinion on how this lack interest.

Wed, December 26th, 2012 6:17pm

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thanks for your straightforward opinion...i'll try harder :) - alvin

Wed, December 26th, 2012 1:19pm

Shahidkhan

Poetry is wonderful, no doubt about that! But rhythm too was excellent. I liked it. If you get time do read and comment on my work.

Thu, December 27th, 2012 5:06am

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i shall take a look...thanks for dropping by :) - alvin

Wed, December 26th, 2012 9:31pm

Astatine09

Oh. aren't they wonderful
But not as wonderful as your poem
Well written, Good idea, excellent

Fri, December 28th, 2012 11:46am

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thanks so much...glad you enjoyed :) - alvin

Fri, December 28th, 2012 7:05pm

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