Fleeting Lover

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is a short poem I wrote about a broken love.
I believe this was inspired by a certain situation I witnessed.

"Fleeting"

Life slowly trembling away,
purpose draining out of existence,
emotions astray.
Chaos at my doorstep.

Melancholy sun,
Dimmed moon,
Where had the beauty of it all gone to?

In this Godless,
fearless,
darkness,
heartless,
lightless
Forgotten and Forbidden
City;
The Hell you abandoned me in--
Without the expense of guilt or,
a proper goodbye.

All changed, forever,
For you; stopped the wheels of destiny,
My fate has now been sullied.

Blinded by the bitter after taste,
Thrown out efforts and time without a blink
Without hesistation to doubt,
Love abruptly came to an end by your side.
Leaving it' place to sorrow and misery,
Sadness and pain.
Shards of a broken heart,
Rarely comes to your mind.

Slowly, with the coming up autumn,
My love has died at your hands,
At the price of my broken heart,
My Soul has been tortured,
My heart, buried
You have fled cowardly,
Without a hesistation.

You, the fleeting lover without guilt!


Submitted: September 24, 2009

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SLJONES

good work loved it sj

Thu, September 24th, 2009 9:24am

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Thank you :)

Thu, September 24th, 2009 2:27am

Jerri Kaplan

Love it! :)

Thu, September 24th, 2009 10:43am

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Thank you! Please check here now and then. I should be posting better work soon.

Fri, September 25th, 2009 7:44pm

CrossingBridges

Beautiful :) I enjoyed it.

Thu, September 24th, 2009 9:13pm

Author
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I am glad! If it appeals to even one person that means a lot to me!

Fri, September 25th, 2009 7:45pm

CrossingBridges

I accidentally erased your comment...sorry! If you want you can write it again. :P

Thu, September 24th, 2009 9:20pm

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:D

Wed, October 28th, 2009 10:14pm

shiawase

it's cute. it could be a lyrics to a song.

Mon, October 12th, 2009 4:13pm

Author
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ah thank you! Maybe, I would have to tweak it a lot :)

Mon, October 12th, 2009 2:40pm

DLCannon

I am very appeald to this one. Nice picture too, it really suits it.

Fri, October 30th, 2009 4:08am

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I am glad you were appealed, it was a personal poem to me.
Thank you for taking the time to read it.

Fri, October 30th, 2009 11:54pm

Rachel Samaraweera

Awesome. Lovely.

Thu, November 19th, 2009 10:27am

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Thanks a bunch!

Sat, November 21st, 2009 9:43am

Mistress of Word Play

That same bitter taste of almonds on the tounge. Loved this poem. My favorite Melancholy. This had my name written all over it. A joy as always my dear friend to read your writes. Susan :)

Sat, November 21st, 2009 3:37pm

Author
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thank you, your reviews mean so much to me
I am happy you enjoy them.
I don't know why but I have this energetic yet melancholy mood by nature.

Sat, November 21st, 2009 9:45am

kitty98

A poem that relates to everybody at one point in life, I love the ways you put the words together to put a very interesting tone.

Great Job.

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 9:57pm

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Thank you.
Yeah my tones I think are the only thing original about poetry. I am a bit of an oddball, which relays to my poetry.
Well, I'd like to think that people have different experiences with love. Love, after all is a pretty common theme, next to war the only topic to have survived so long, in all cultures, religions and societies and languages. There is something about love that tugs us into it, eternally.

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 8:59pm

lily of the nile

Simply wonderful piece. I love things like this. Lily

Tue, December 1st, 2009 2:35am

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Thank you!

Wed, December 2nd, 2009 12:06pm

hollydar

Another brilliant poem - I don't know how I missed this before. You can certainly put feelings, with your words, that we all experience sometime, so clearly, that the feelings come flooding back. I am giving this my I like it vote. Pat

Tue, January 26th, 2010 10:24pm

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Hi Pat! Thank you.
This one gets left out. It was my first poem published on booksie. So doesn't get many hits as much anymore :( But that's okay.
I am so very happy that you liked this.
Thank you for your insight and comments.

Wed, January 27th, 2010 7:42am

MADNESS IN INK

Brilliant but sad write. A pleasure to read dear friend. M

Thu, January 28th, 2010 2:05am

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Thank you very much. Its always very delightful to hear from you.

Wed, January 27th, 2010 9:00pm

chaddillingham

Exceptional write. You are truly an amazing writer. Chad

Thu, January 28th, 2010 5:39am

Author
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Thank you Chad. You have no idea how much that means to me. I still have ways to go, but this is great encouragement to me!

Thu, January 28th, 2010 10:37pm

mommy3

Lovely poem. I loved it. You have talent my friend looking forward to reading your other pieces as well. Jessica :D

Fri, January 29th, 2010 5:53am

Author
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Thank you so much Jessica. That means so much to me!

Thu, January 28th, 2010 10:34pm

danielmiller

Sad yet written with love and caring. Only you can make the words omit the feel. Wonderful poem!

Fri, January 29th, 2010 6:24am

Author
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Thank you for the very delightful comment Daniel. I work hard and hopefully slowly it will be apparent in my work.

Thu, January 28th, 2010 10:33pm

Capman

Without guilt! that's telling em. So much despair in the words. The poem is solid the whole way through.

Mon, July 5th, 2010 5:54am

Author
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Thank you. There are some editing to be done, but I am a bit occupied at the moment.
I hope you know how much it means to me that you keep reading and commenting on my work :)

Mon, July 5th, 2010 5:17am

Graeme Montrose

Stunning piece of writing that brings emotions felt to the fore, a piece of life's truth. It is a sad fact of life that such storms we have to endure and do the best to get through. Well done!

Fri, August 27th, 2010 7:28am

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Thank you! I am ever forever grateful to you for your kind words.

Mon, September 13th, 2010 11:32am

denada

Beautiful writing

Sun, January 31st, 2016 11:20am

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