Atop a tall tree house

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Atop a tall tree house
He starts to write,
Of his lavish brilliant life
In short sweet poems

He writes and writes,
In company of the birds
In company of the woodpecker
Who pecks on his tree

Atop a tall tree house

He starts to write,

Of his lavish brilliant life

In short sweet poems

He writes and writes,

In company of the birds

In company of the woodpecker

Who pecks on his tree

He writes and writes,

Dreaming, thinking & brooding

As his thoughts fly and scatter

Rapidly in all different directions

He writes and writes,

From noon to the sunset

And finally finishes his work,

When the sun is about to set

He then closes his book

And kisses his notebook

as takes it gently in his hand

He takes his pen

Places it in his pocket

& watches the road below

At last,

He climbs down the tree

Buries his notebook

In the rocks & sand under

& he takes a new book from his bag

& he walks on with his pen in hand

To continue his strange wondrous journey

To find other tree houses &

To find other tall trees..

SRINIDHI.R

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Submitted: November 29, 2011

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LTskittles125

oh wow this is really good :) great job with word choice
keep up the writing
-LT

Tue, November 29th, 2011 5:56am

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thanks..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 12:04am

smruti

great wording dear nice one....just great...liked it.

Tue, November 29th, 2011 7:37am

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thanks smruthi..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 12:05am

mdh7

Great poem! Well written. Thanks for drawing my attention to it.

Tue, November 29th, 2011 8:13am

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thank you..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 7:31am

springsun

So sweet!
I like the simplicity and the short storyline of this poem. But what I loved about it, was the circle you created. He starts off in a tree, and moves on to another. And of course, as always, I enjoyed the most vivid descriptions.

Thanks for letting me know. Keep up the good work.

Tue, November 29th, 2011 10:14am

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thank you..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 7:32am

A7XRica

I love this poem.
It shows the simplicity and the contentment of the "character". Good job!

Tue, November 29th, 2011 10:33am

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thank you..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 7:32am

Tech True Story

This is very good :)

Tue, November 29th, 2011 10:38am

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thanks..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 7:33am

Ekeuhie

On the road again... A hunter with fire in his eyes and the thirst for adventure ravishing his mind. Nice one. Here comes the beautiful imperfection. Maybe you should try other synonyms for notebook. I saw it repeated over and over again. You could use parchment, scroll, etc, you know. Make it really adventurous.

Tue, November 29th, 2011 11:52am

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yeah will keep it in mind..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 7:33am

ashtray0belief

I feel as if on some level you're writting about yourself too, because it seems like you put your heart in your poems like the man in this poem.
Very good. Thank you for the invite :)

Tue, November 29th, 2011 5:25pm

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thank you..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 9:02pm

Don George

Hi nid,
Very interesting.
The picture you paint is easily seen and even more importantly, felt.
I like the neverending quality to this (like life).
:D

Tue, November 29th, 2011 6:12pm

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thanks..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 9:03pm

Wilbur

Yup, yup, yip. That's just how it lives, isn't it Nid? One notebook at a time, one day at a time, trillions and mega-millions of thoughts, and lots and lots and lots and lots and lots of writing.
Kind regards, Wilbur

Tue, November 29th, 2011 11:39pm

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thank you dear friend..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 9:04pm

youinspireme

Wow this is truly a beautiful poem

Wed, November 30th, 2011 2:17am

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thank you for reading..

Tue, November 29th, 2011 9:04pm

SmileValentine

done reading this! it's a nice piece and i like it :)

Wed, November 30th, 2011 10:40am

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thanks..

Wed, November 30th, 2011 2:56am

Maij

Thanks for dropping the request, this is a beautiful poem. The imagery was so simply descried but at the same time beautifully vivid. I also loved you description of his writing process; the phases he experienced are so true for almost every write (me included) however, I found the end of the poem enigmatic; he seemed to put so much of himself into the work but he left it behind. Did you intended to symbolize a specific theme or idea? Overall, excellent poem Nid :) I really did enjoy reading??

Wed, November 30th, 2011 4:12pm

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the writer here enjoys the whole process of writing..he has lost himself in writing, to say so..he is not writing it for the people..he is not wanting anyone to read his writing..he is writing for the joy of writing alone..the writer is an introvert lost in his own thoughts, emotions and feelings..he is a loner but he is a true writer..he leaves his notebook behind at the end and continues his great journey to discover himself through the process of writing..he is on the path to becoming a great writer..

Wed, November 30th, 2011 8:33pm

Irish wolf hound

Lovely poem, enjoyed every bit. ;D

Wed, November 30th, 2011 8:09pm

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thanks..

Wed, November 30th, 2011 8:34pm

yazz4youu

Great poem! I really enjoyed it. :)

Thu, December 1st, 2011 6:00pm

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thanks..

Thu, December 1st, 2011 7:52pm

yazz4youu

Great poem! I really enjoyed it. :)

Thu, December 1st, 2011 6:00pm

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thank you..

Thu, December 1st, 2011 7:53pm

Bany

Hi =) I really liked this poem, and you repetition in particular. I also like that you DIDN'T rhyme: it would be too cheesy if you did. Fantastic job!

Fri, December 2nd, 2011 9:33am

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thank you..

Fri, December 2nd, 2011 3:05am

chikeria12

This is really well written. The imagery you create is so vivid and well seen in the readers mind. I love how it tells a story, too. How he goes to one tree one day and the next a new one. Awesome job!

Sat, December 3rd, 2011 2:19pm

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thank you for reading..

Sat, December 3rd, 2011 7:04am

Neekas

Very nice VERY!I can't find the meanings easily so thanx also for Maij for asking and everything coz (ahem:I being annoying ahem ahem).As always not just writting a poem but also getting a great lesson for us nid.Give yourself a gredit.Yeah, these days people feel as if their art (whatever that is) is not worthy if it's not shown to others-and I don't leave myself out of this poor thinking.We all want to make a history, live our name somewhere to not extcinct withought ever walking on earth.I think that's why.
I bow to those who do it only for their love for it or because they truly want to make a change and not just draw attention above themseles.Great work Nid.Let me know for anything new.

Sat, December 3rd, 2011 3:58pm

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thank you neekas..thanks for reading and commenting..

Sat, December 3rd, 2011 9:08pm

Starlit

I really like it! It has a mysterious tone to it, and causes you to imagine what the man is doing :D let me know if you have other work you would like me to read. And if you have time, I would appreciate you having a look at me novel, "Dragon Escape". Thanks!!!! -star

Wed, December 14th, 2011 7:28pm

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yeah thank you for reading..I will read your works..

Wed, December 14th, 2011 9:02pm

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