Thy Eternal Light Of Happiness

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A beautiful prayer for everyone!

Let me sail away,

To the sandy shore

To the place where there is bliss!

Let me fly away,

To the sky

To the place where there is endless peace!

Let me run away,

To tranquility

To the place where there is love!

Let me walk away,

To eternity

To the place where there is beauty!

All with the Divine Lord

Away from troubles and sorrows,

With my mind and soul,

Shedding Thy eternal light of happiness!

alt

-Srinidhi.R


Submitted: May 02, 2009

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Gentlespirit

LOVE is eternal Nid........and so the light shines down on us and in our writings - as seen here ;0)x

Vee

Sat, May 2nd, 2009 4:24pm

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Yes! Thank you for reading!

Sat, May 2nd, 2009 7:50pm

Zia Jaycee

beautiful, beautiful....this is lovely....thanks for becoming my fan and sorry for not responding sooner! This poem is awesome...it is similar to a lot of my poetry... keep writing! :) zia

Sun, May 3rd, 2009 1:50am

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Thank you for reading

Sat, May 2nd, 2009 7:52pm

NoS482

Nid awsome poem you wrote about the eternal light we all have a view of what that may look like and be with a divine power I wrote about my view of this seeing family member that passed and things that give us spiritual peace. One thing is surfing and playing music. Too surf is more than riding on water. It's spiritual oneness with the divine powers creations water, earth, wind, spirit. I am babling again lol. Love your poem. NoS482 8-)

Sat, May 9th, 2009 3:31pm

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thanks........................have a nice day

Sat, May 9th, 2009 8:43am

oricesdracco

wow, what a good graces view of heaven that is so peacefull and tranquel, that was my takke on it, i like it keep up the good work, take care, dracco

Sun, May 10th, 2009 2:51am

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thanks for reading

Sat, May 9th, 2009 10:03pm

Gagan

Excellent..sorry it took so late to read and reply..but I am glad that I read it, it was very beautiful..

Sun, May 10th, 2009 3:56pm

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thank you for reading gagan

Sun, May 10th, 2009 8:59pm

Vamplit

Great poem you have worked hard to intrench so much peace within it. However you do need to think about how to punctuate it. Try reading it aloud and see where you want to pause. Keep it up nid you are really working hard and you will get there in the end.

Take care vamplit.

Sun, May 10th, 2009 4:45pm

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thanks vamplit..i will look into the punctuation

Sun, May 10th, 2009 8:59pm

VictoriaDawn

beautiful! very peaceful and lovely :)

Mon, May 11th, 2009 7:12pm

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thanks a lot for reading..

Mon, May 11th, 2009 9:22pm

Lady Sakaki

Though I'm not very religious, this is heartwarming and nice.

The first stanza, you start off with,

"Let me sail away,

To the sandy shore

To the place where there is bliss!

Let me fly away,

To the sky

To the place where there is eternal peace!"

However, you end with,

"Let me run away,

To the place where there is love!

Let me walk away,

To the place where there is beauty!"

In these four lines, you don't give a specific destination you're going to "run away" and "walk away" to, unlike your first lines that say you're going to "sail away" to a "shore" and "fly away" to the sky. Since your first lines kept that pattern, when I read these last lines, it seemed to disrupt the rhythm you had established. If you were to provide places where you can "run away" and "walk away" to, your flow can resume, and your poem and sound better.

Just a suggestion. :)

Sun, May 17th, 2009 11:28am

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yeh i will correct that

Sun, May 17th, 2009 9:45am

nid

i have corrected the poem to make a smooth flow...

Sun, May 17th, 2009 4:58pm

AshleyJayy

Oh this is beautiful, I can definitely relate to the longing and I'm sure many others can too. Wonderfully written in His name :]

Thu, May 21st, 2009 2:31am

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thankssssssssssssssssssssss

Wed, May 20th, 2009 8:42pm

tammanna

hey excellent prayer...God is really going to answer your prayers if you recite these lines to him lol :D
great job !!!

Mon, May 25th, 2009 4:36am

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thanks again tammanna....

Sun, May 24th, 2009 11:05pm

nid

The soul can split the sky in two and let the face of God shine through. ~Edna St. Vincent Millay

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Sat, May 30th, 2009 4:00am

nid

No matter how much I prove and prod,
I cannot quite believe in God;
But oh, I hope to God that He
Unswervingly believes in me.
~E.Y. Harburg, attributed

(FEW QUOTES I LIKE)

Sat, May 30th, 2009 4:00am

nid

Some of God's greatest gifts are unanswered prayers. ~Garth Brooks

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Sat, May 30th, 2009 4:01am

nid

Hunting God is a great adventure. ~Marie DeFloris

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Sat, May 30th, 2009 4:02am

nid

Darkness cannot put out the Light. It can only make God brighter. ~Author Unknown

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Sat, May 30th, 2009 4:02am

nid

I recently received a comment(not on booksie) saying that I was too young to write spiritual poetry and that too i needed experience. The comment said I wrote this with no experience and the person said "If there is happiness on the other shore, how could u say there is? how can u say there is peace on the other side? how? u stil don't know!''
That I think is the words of an atheist..
anyways I require your comments on this....

Sat, May 30th, 2009 2:21pm

EdwardJBradleySr

nid:

Well written and presented. Excellent choice and treatment of theme. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

Liked your choice of photographs as well.

Gave it an "I Like It" vote. Most well deserved.

Did not leave any comment for you on this poem anywhere else. Moreover, I do not leave negative comments like the one described by you.

The world is full of people who want to "bring us down" and, at the same time, give the misleading impression they are someone else. We just have to ignore them and delete their comments, if we can. Then, most importantly, forget about them. We each need to follow this procedure as often as it may happen.

Do you think I left such a comment? If so, then why? Because I did not do so. Please let me know. Thank you.

Happier trails,

Ed Bradley.

Sun, May 31st, 2009 1:49am

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thank u so much sir..u are righyt! thanks again

Sat, May 30th, 2009 7:40pm

Sunshine Raines

great piece I loved it good work. S.R.

Mon, June 1st, 2009 2:15am

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have a nice day..thanks for commenting

Sun, May 31st, 2009 8:48pm

jfm98

BEAUTIFUL! Sorry for not coming by ya page until now. I'm graduating next week, so it's been kinda hectic.

Wed, June 3rd, 2009 2:56pm

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Its okay! thank u for commenting!

Wed, June 3rd, 2009 8:28pm

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