I enjoyed writing this, trying to create a sense of conflict and uncertainty. Hope you enjoy. Thanks for reading.

Failing to find a cause

But filled with that of which power draws

Standing in the face of opposition

While populace is environed with fiction

 

When moved with cause and effect

You decide what it is that will infect

Living with the notion of pre-existing fate

Betrays the priorities I myself nominate

 

To fall for societies illusion

Is impuissance of living by your own persuasion

Conning my mind into wanting tranquility

But being the sole purpose of dispute's uncertainty

 

I'll nurture the chaos of voice

And make an indecisive choice

In turn expecting silence

To find I'm living in ambivalence


Submitted: April 29, 2013

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MissInkBlot

The last verse did it for me

Mon, April 29th, 2013 9:37am

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Thanks.

Mon, April 29th, 2013 8:39am

MissInkBlot

Consider uploading this on Tallenge :)

Mon, April 29th, 2013 9:52am

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Okay.

Mon, April 29th, 2013 8:39am

TheTeddybearNinja

This is really nice. It describes a feeling in a way that you have to think about it and go deeper into the words to discover the true meaning. Kudos, this is really well put together!

Mon, April 29th, 2013 8:06pm

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Thanks a lot.

Mon, April 29th, 2013 1:09pm

Julie March

I liked the first two lines of the last stanza. They really sounded good together. But of course, great poem overall, as usual.

Mon, April 29th, 2013 8:32pm

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Thanks.

Mon, April 29th, 2013 7:10pm

The story that dont have a end

Great job.Loved your way of writing and representing your thoughts

Tue, April 30th, 2013 5:52am

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Thank you.

Tue, April 30th, 2013 8:07am

Criss Sole

I really liked this. I read it a few times now. Great poem.

Tue, April 30th, 2013 7:52am

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Thanks a lot. Always enjoy your comments.

Tue, April 30th, 2013 8:08am

Entity

Nice work. I really enjoyed it.

Tue, April 30th, 2013 12:52pm

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Thanks.

Tue, April 30th, 2013 8:08am

fallenangel1992

hey great work .I loved it

Tue, April 30th, 2013 2:24pm

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Thanks.

Tue, April 30th, 2013 8:07am

Harmony Sophia

Wow truly moving bravo BRAVO!

Wed, May 1st, 2013 10:35pm

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Thank you, Harmony.

Wed, May 1st, 2013 5:30pm

jerimusiclover

Whoa... This is some seriously good work! It took me reading it a couple of times to fully understand it cause it kept shifting meaning every time I read it lol and for a poem to be able to do that requires unimaginable skill (according to me anyway lol). Loved it. Seriously loved it! Maybe some punctuation? It would probably help in understanding better but that's just me :)
Loved the depth and complexity of your words and, like someone up there already said, the last stanza was a winner. It worked and tied the whole thing together beautifully. Amazing amazing work! Keep writing!!
Looking forward to reading more :D
~Jeri xo

Thu, May 2nd, 2013 11:10am

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Wow. That means a lot. Thank you soooo much.

Thu, May 2nd, 2013 6:37pm

badhaas7

Great poem (:

Fri, May 3rd, 2013 12:37am

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Thanks,

Thu, May 2nd, 2013 6:36pm

ashi17

Deep and touching, good work!!
Keep writing :)

Wed, May 8th, 2013 4:23am

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thank u

Wed, May 8th, 2013 3:49pm

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