Rage builds up and at one point you gotta let it out

there may be some grammer mistakes, i didnt check them

im face turns from a tanned color to a pale white
my eyes turn red and my lips pierce into one
my hands hang down at my sides in little balls of fist

im peeling with rage
dammit, why cant you understand?
all i want to do is to scream and make you listen
you dont notice until my angry tears hit the table

you look up as if you didnt know what was wrong
that only brings more rage
i dont want to say a thing
i want to yell at you, but i cant

i just wish you'd stop trying to change me
and start looking into my soul and see the great things in it
you keep on saying God would have wanted it this way
all i can do is look at you and scream inside

our arguement heats up and up unto a fire
i charge out of the house to cool down
i walk for hours screaming  inside and huffing on the out

i look up and hear the sky
it begins to cry
harder and harder does the rain come down
and washes my anger away

i sit on the ground thinking and crying with the rain
"i guess not its time."
i walk home
with my anger cooled down to embers i walk in


Submitted: August 03, 2008

© Copyright 2022 Penelope Garenther. All rights reserved.

Add Your Comments:

Comments

ReganFinch

Hey Penelope :) You are very honest in this poem and it takes a very secure and talented writer to do that. This poem shows your vulnerable side as well as your angrier one. You show a lot of talent here and I hope you keep writing! Take care, Regan

Mon, August 4th, 2008 4:24am

Author
Reply

Thank you.

Mon, August 4th, 2008 12:04pm

gabrielbrum

First of all, thanks for reding all of my articles, I´m so glad you read all of them. Once again thanks so much, u are so kind.
This poem is a work of art, I could feel your anger from the very begining of the poem. It transmits so well the feeling. Well written!

Tue, August 5th, 2008 9:39pm

Author
Reply

Oh no problem they were really good.
Thank you :)

Tue, August 5th, 2008 2:44pm

Kshitij Sharma

i look up and hear the sky
it begins to cry


Beautiful. You are indeed very talented and write from the heart. Pure and unadulterated. Thanks for a good read.

Thu, August 7th, 2008 7:45am

Author
Reply

oh well your very welcome my dear

Thu, August 7th, 2008 1:04am

Shawn

Good job in expressing your anger. But, what did you mean
"God would have wanted it this way"? Just a quick question.

Sat, August 9th, 2008 6:13am

Gaarababylove12300

Hey, this was a very awsome poem. I keep trying to find ways to describe my anger, but you described yours and I feel as if you're describing mine as well. I can't control my temper, but I"ve been trying to reign it in. This poem was just amazing. I look forward to reading more.

Sun, August 10th, 2008 5:05pm

Author
Reply

i hardly ever get angry, but when im on the red dot...well hell hath no fury when a woman is scorned. thanks

Sun, August 10th, 2008 2:14pm

UnspokenSoul22

I liked it.
Just remember you have to capitalize every word that starts a new line. :3
Just tryin' to help.
Besides that, a very good poem, indeed.

((I'd love it, if you'd check out some of my poems and give me some feedback.))

Mon, August 11th, 2008 2:13pm

Author
Reply

okay thank you!

Mon, August 11th, 2008 11:12am

Demon Cat

I like it, you speak the truth in your words. I like it.

Sat, August 30th, 2008 9:16pm

Author
Reply

thanks (:

Sat, August 30th, 2008 4:21pm

Itsuwari

What incredibly odd figurative language. "Peeling with anger"? Brilliant, I love it, it sets this odd sense of the omission and emission of joy and happiness in place of fear and anger. Bloody well done, I love it.

Tue, November 4th, 2008 5:28am

Author
Reply

:) i think that was one of the raddest messages i have gotten on booksie. thank you.

Wed, November 5th, 2008 4:17pm

Unbreakablee

This is good, but just a reminder to capitalize every new sentence in a poem.
The meaning behind it was great. I enjoyed reading it.

Thu, August 12th, 2010 3:01am

Author
Reply

Alrighty, I'll do that from now on. Thanks.

Thu, August 12th, 2010 3:24am

Facebook Comments