"Pride A Deadly Sin"

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Seven deadly sins poem of the day.

Pride

 

How many times have you said I done this so I can benifit myself

Did you ever stop to think how it could benifit someone else

 

Why do you do the things you do

Do you do them to help others or just for you

 

Too many times people say I'm gonna do this for a living

Are they doing for themselves or to help other human beings

 

People need to stop and think how their actions are gonna reflect on others

Not just whether it's gonna help them finance further

 

All you hear is the word I

That's the sin of Pride

 

There are so many people with this sin these days

They are so full of it they get lost in there ways

 

If only we can get rid of the I and put in we

I believe the world could be better for you and me

 

So let's come together and try to break this sin

So it will be better when the next generation begins


Submitted: April 15, 2009

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Flash

Wow! Your flow and rhyme just gets better and better with each of these poems. And you have done such a great job with each of these subjects. This one was like listening to you talk to me in person yet in verse. Wow! I do believe you have stepped up now and proved yourself worthy. Great Job with the deadly sins. I have enjoyed all of them.

Wed, April 15th, 2009 3:21pm

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Thanks.I appreciate the great compliment.I'm glad you enjoyed them all.I'm glad I accepted such a hard task.I enjoyed writing them,and glad I did.Thanks for your wonderful comment.It means alot.

Wed, April 15th, 2009 3:19pm

angellynn

A very brilliant ending to this poem-a-thon. It seems you have done well with the seven deadly sins.

Great Job viper!

Angellynn :)

Wed, April 15th, 2009 3:55pm

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Thanks.I'm glad you enjoyed it.It was a challenge,but I finished them.I'm glad you enjoyed them all.Thanks for the comment.

Wed, April 15th, 2009 3:16pm

CanadianIdiot

Incedibly impressive, Viper! I'll have to go read the others when I can! Also, awesome idea making a poem-a-day for yourself! It's a fun way to get more stuff up!

Thu, April 16th, 2009 12:31am

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Thanks Canadian.I appreciate the great compliment.I'm glad you liked it.Thanks for the great comment.It means alot.

Thu, April 16th, 2009 2:48am

Cherry Berry

I think Pride is probably the hardest sin to deal with in our selves... Pride can so easily blind us with self rightousness, and throws humility out the window easily if we are not careful. Well penned.

xox
Cherri

Thu, April 16th, 2009 3:44am

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I believe it is as well,and you're right it does throw it out.Thanks again so much.

Thu, April 16th, 2009 2:42am

C.R.GRIFFITHS

'People need to stop and think how their actions are gonna reflect on others'

Jesus.. if life was that easy.. A amazing poem this really relates to me, especially those words. Really good work !

Thu, April 16th, 2009 7:34pm

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Thanks.I believe it reflects on us all.We all have a problem with pride at some time or another.None of us are exempt to this sin.We get lost in ourselves when we try to better ourselves.Some people only care about theirselves and only look out for themselves.It's so sad too.Thanks for sharing your thoughts and commenting.

Thu, April 16th, 2009 4:03pm

Pratibha

so true, when we ruin peace and happiness in others' lives we never say ' I ruined it, I shall fix it." But when it comes to blowing our own trumpet, we do it with shameless elegance.
the world needs more of WE and less of "I am great" persons...

Sat, April 18th, 2009 3:32pm

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I agree with you.I'm glad you can relate to this.Too many people only try to please theirselves these days.We all need to work together and become more helpful of each other.Thanks for your thoughts and the comment.

Sat, April 18th, 2009 8:54pm

Carnation

Once again an excellent poem Viper! Pride means: one has turned towards the direction of destruction... self destruction and most hopeless stupidity.

I think i am a happy person because God saves me from Pride each time i feel inclined towards it. Your poem movingly sums up the hazards of being blindly arrogant.I loved it like always.

Fri, April 24th, 2009 12:27pm

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That's very sweet of you to say.I hope we can all turn away from it.It would so much better if we could.I think we'd all be much more happier as well.Thanks for commenting.It means alot.

Fri, April 24th, 2009 7:32am

Catherine

Good. I agree with you: people are so selfish and proud these days that it sometimes makes me sick. I try to help others, but sometimes you just can't help but feel a little selfish.

One thing: Just a typo, but...They are so full of it they get lost in there ways

"there" should be "their".

Good work:)

Tue, May 5th, 2009 9:56pm

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Thanks.I appreciate that.It's been said you can't help anyone unless they're willing to help theirselves.I believe that at times.They have to make the first step to want help.But,we still need to offer it.Thanks for sharing your thoughts and commenting.

Tue, May 5th, 2009 9:39pm

Anastasia Starlena

A very thought provoking piece and so true. I find myself at times needing to be humbled in the face of others. We all have a selfish nature I think. But if we all took the time and just went out of our way to do something nice and give just think of the change we would create in the world.

Take Care,
Ana

Sat, May 9th, 2009 6:21pm

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I believe we all have a selfish nature to us.We all could think and do for others more.We should all humble ourselves more.Thanks for your thoughts and comment.

Sat, May 9th, 2009 6:03pm

Stormy Raines

Great poam compleatly true to. if you get a chance id like you to come read some of my poams

Sun, June 7th, 2009 8:02am

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Thanks.I'll be sure to do that.

Sun, June 7th, 2009 10:11pm

Manyfacets

Hello Viper:
It's nice to discover that other people
attempted the "seven deadly sins" this one
outlining pride is very good. You managed to
hit the target on this one. When I made my
attempt at them my heart wasn't in it; so I
think I blew it. Good work! M.

Fri, June 26th, 2009 11:32pm

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Thanks.I appreciate that.I'm sorry to hear your heart wasn't in it.I hope you'll try again.It was a challenge.It took some thinking.I'm glad I was able to finish them.

Fri, June 26th, 2009 7:32pm

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