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The Girl Who Owns Not A Name


Seven-year-old Alice was playing with some new friends at the park. She sat at the bench to rest her legs for a bit, when a strange man wearing a black hooded cloak, sat beside her."Hello, young one." the strange man said addressing young Alice. "Hello, my mommy says I shouldn't talk to strangers." Alice replied. "Then your mother is a wise woman, but do not fret young one, for I am no stranger, everyone knows me." The strange man replied. "Does my mommy know you?" Alice asked after a few minutes of silence. " Ah, yes. Your mother knows me quite well." The man stood and said,"Come on. I want to show you something." Alice stood and took the man's cold hand.

Alice's stomach and throat started burning. It hurt her so bad she started crying. "What's wrong, young one? Is it your throat?" Alice could only nod as her throat closed with searing pain. "Would you like me to help you get rid of that awful pain?" The man leaned down to her hieght after recieving another nod from the young girl."Just reach in and pull it out. Then all pain will be gone, okay?" She nodded again and happily complied. Her mother shreiked and ran to her fallen daughter, who had both hands down her tiny thoat and laying in a pool of her own blood. Alice started convulsing and screaming. Abruptly, after ten minutes, everything stopped and she sat up."Oh, Alice. Why ever did you do that?" her mom asked hugging her pale and cold daughter.

"I'll show you." the young girl replied in an eerie sing song voice. Her mother eyed her strangley."Alice, what are you talking about?" Alice looked back to her mother with an undistinguishable glint in her eyes and said,"I'll show you."in that same eerie tone."Alice?" Her mother said a little frightened." I am not Alice." The girl shrieked," I have no name." The girl stood and grabbed her mother, pulling her away from prying eyes. As soon as the two were alone Alice repeated,"I'll show you." Once more before reaching forward and taking the neck of her greif-stricken mother and snapping it. Satisfied that the woman was no longer breathing, she stepped out of the forest-like area she had been in. The man stood there waiting for her. She took his hand and he started leading her away."You never told me your name." The little girl said turning and looking up at the man."Death is my name. Now, you will work for me." he replied in his raspy voice. He lead her away from the park where the two split and faded in two different directions.

Submitted: November 24, 2009

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I don't get it, what she pull out? you got the horror part right.

Tue, November 24th, 2009 2:29am


She was going through stages of being possessed, well my own stages that I made, and so she didn't really pull anything out, but her pure aura and soul were trying to fight out Death's added bits. ( This was not my idea, about the aura and soul thing, it was liquidvamp's(sorry if I mispelled it) and so I used it.

Thanks for the comment and Happy Thanksgiving!! =)

Tue, November 24th, 2009 4:10pm


hm, i like it suspenseful keeping you on edge while your reading trying to figure out what it is the little girl with no name, is trying to do. my question is if she then became a little girl with no name what happened with alice, you must continue this, it makes me wanna read more, but there is no more lol. i like it i really do, as per the first comment you could describe what it is that is chought in alice's throat, but there you would have to figure it out leaving it blank makes people wonder what it could have been that came from nowhere, and it makes people try and think or i should say think of an objet that they are guessing it could be, when i read that i was thinking that it was an arua thing or along them lines, where as the hooded figure toched her is when she fealt the pain, while he knew what she was feeling, its some what morbid in a good way i think i really like you should continue this story, if you can.

Tue, November 24th, 2009 3:03am


Okay so its official, I'm your bestie for life. Thanks for your kind words and you inspired me. So thank you. And further more I will answer your question, Alice is still within the young girl in a sense that she remembers conversing with the mysterious hooded figure, but she is possessed by a mixture of Death's aura and what little soul there is to make her demented and make her the evil little thing she is. As for your comment about school, yeah I know we get out at 4 on normal days that is. But now we are out for Thanksgiving break so yay!

thanks for your comment and happy thanksgiving!! =)

Tue, November 24th, 2009 4:02pm


easily your best story. easy to follow, haha no gays or incest

Fri, March 19th, 2010 10:39am


Hey. Don't hate. Alright. Those are my best. Wait you read those? Oh. Well. I hate this story. Its easily my worst story. And I need to work on it.

Tue, March 23rd, 2010 5:32pm

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