Something Wrong

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is the story of a victim, of abuse. Very close to my heart.

Laying on the side of the road,

blood on me, not being able to see.

I don't know where I am,

all I can remeber is a huge slam.

I'm in so much pain, I can't explain.

All over I'm bruised, from being abused.

Some bones are broken,

he was certainly outspoken.

I can hardly breathe, just from the awful sheathe.

Next thing I know, I wake up, in a room thinking "WOAH!"

I open my eyes, and right there to my suprise,

my family smiling at me, so glad for me.

And now I have a scar, from a person who went to far.

What a hurtful thing this was to do, I wish I could be happy agian,

I wish I knew. What a life could be, with never having to be afraid,

wishing my memory would fade.

But at least I'm alive, I'm lucky I was able to survive.

So now I stand tall, from a great fall.

That tested me, so I could see, how much God loves me.

Submitted: September 13, 2009

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very nice

Mon, September 14th, 2009 1:09pm


Well thank you!

Mon, September 14th, 2009 2:44pm


My goodness that was good! My daughter just got out of an abusive relationship. She is pregnant. Her heart hurts so bad. She is only 18. This all left her so confused. I know with time she will heal, but right now all I can do is love her and try to make her feel worthy of life.
This poem capture her as though you knew her. Wonderful poem, tough subject. Great job!

Wed, September 23rd, 2009 6:46pm


Ohh, I am so sorry to hear that. Tell your daughter I'm sorry. I'll keep her in my thoughts. Tragic. Thanks for the wonderful comment!

Wed, September 23rd, 2009 2:25pm

Brian W

Another good poem and sadly abuse happens everyday "I know" But I can tell you the memories will fade Stay strong and look to the future. Good to see you have family to support you. A well written poem with good flow.

Sun, November 8th, 2009 11:51pm


It does. That was the heart of this poem. I have to disagree with you on that, memerioes like this don't fade, they may decreese over time, but the real truth is is that the live with you forever. Thanks!!

Sun, November 8th, 2009 7:18pm

Brian W

You are correct in that they will never be forgotten. Read my poem "Young Life" that was 40 years ago the event not the poem. I learnt poetry last year and this was one of the poems that just came to me. Fade or decrease but never disappear. I understood the poem well

Mon, November 9th, 2009 4:44am


Thanks. I will read it soon! Promise!! =] Thanks for the comments!

Mon, November 9th, 2009 8:08pm

swedish fish

That was great. I got the vibe it was based on a true story. You seem to know a lot of sad stories. They seem like they'd be hard to write about. Good job for doing it, though.

Sun, December 13th, 2009 7:42pm


Thanks. Acutally it wasn't true it kinda was what a victim felt like. Sad topics are just what i think of its not really anything imparticular.

Sun, December 13th, 2009 2:11pm


I like the way you are able to tell a story in a poem .. I like the happy end

Wed, May 23rd, 2012 3:35pm

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