Thirst For Blood

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fan Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

about a vampire ready to drink my blood...

You want to hunt me down,

you see me all around.

Watching my every move,

making changes to improve,

your plan to kill me.

You always have a

constant thirst for my blood,

ready to take me alive,

with little chance I'll survive.

You want my blood,

to drink it sweet,

then your mission will be complete.

?


Submitted: October 29, 2009

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Brian W

A nice little poem about a hungry vampire. It has good flow and not bad rhyme. I enjoyed the read.

Tue, November 10th, 2009 5:47am

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Thanks, I don't like this one at all.

Tue, November 10th, 2009 2:37pm

Damius

I like it. When I read it I had the most macabre image of a little girl singing it in a sugary sweet voice. it the kind of thing that a very messed up vampire would have coming from one of those wind up music boxes that have little dancers in them. It flowed quite well, but the line 'your plan to kill me' seemed to break the rhythm a bit, not enough syllables I think to fit in with the four lines before it that had six and seven.

Sat, November 14th, 2009 9:09pm

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Great! I know I realized that after I wrote it, but I'm fairly happy with this poem.

Sat, November 14th, 2009 2:08pm

solitaire fable

Cool, I could almost taste blood. Love vampires, your great love solitaire x

Fri, November 27th, 2009 2:24pm

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Thanks! Me too!

Fri, November 27th, 2009 8:54am

PaulChafer

The current vampire imagery gets everywhere doesn't it, even writing about one myself. The poem scans well, not sure if it wouldn't be better not rhyming, but you do tell a story and that's appreciated.
Paul.

Tue, December 1st, 2009 11:41am

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Thanks, I don't like this one very much. It was done fast and I wish it had more imagry to it.
-123 =]

Wed, December 2nd, 2009 5:56pm

Erynn Louviaite

The rhyme and flow were kinda strange, but it was an interesting idea for a poem

Fri, December 11th, 2009 10:58pm

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i know its not very good. this poem is bad i might take it off of here. i really can right much better than this.

Fri, December 11th, 2009 8:38pm

swedish fish

ooh. Twilight fan? Me, not so much. The books were pretty good but I really disliked the movie. Anyway, that was a very different poem.

Tue, December 29th, 2009 2:09am

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I actually hate this poem its really dumb and dosen't make anysense. Yes I am though. I don't like the movies but I love the books!
-smiles!

Tue, December 29th, 2009 11:40am

NazireC

Interesting. Not my favorite, but I think you've done a pretty good job.

Mon, February 15th, 2010 10:42pm

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Thanks.

-smiles:)

Tue, February 16th, 2010 7:44pm

Darklady

I love vampires stories and all related to it; this poem is interesting, not a bad one lol it's a funny poem and I enjoyed to read it

Wed, May 23rd, 2012 3:33pm

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Thanks!

Sat, May 26th, 2012 7:20pm

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