in the darkness a heart beats alone

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

a poem

My heart beats in the dark

its empty

i wait for morning

silently praying for mercy from my relentless thoughts

silently hoping, hoping, hoping

running with no legs

singing with no voice

hoping you won't come to my mind

i erase your face from my heart

replace it with emptiness

a hole

the gaping hole of your absence bites me with invisable fangs

sleep wont come to this tired body

your face burning through my mind.


Submitted: December 07, 2012

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Entity

Interesting work. Very well written, and with passion to spare. I enjoyed it.

Fri, December 7th, 2012 1:40pm

Author
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Thank you.Its raw with pure emotion from my thoughts.

Fri, December 7th, 2012 1:21pm

AHeartlessFool

This really hits home for me and I am really glad that I found you as a writer so that I could read this. This is really good writing, keep it up!

Wed, December 12th, 2012 5:54pm

Author
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Thsnk you so much :)

Wed, December 12th, 2012 7:30pm

fred2012

This is quite a reflection...keep up the good work

Wed, December 19th, 2012 12:51am

Author
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Thank you :)

Tue, December 18th, 2012 5:37pm

princeidris22

this is nice

Sun, May 5th, 2013 7:51pm

Author
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Haha thanks dear :)

Sun, May 5th, 2013 1:00pm

Maria Linda

Again i can't help but be impressed with the way you have with wordplay. I love how you express the depth of emotion through it.

Just noticeable though the misuse/lack of proper punctuation and some spelling lapses. I believe that we owe it to our readers to give them our best(as far as we can go) and that includes making sure we do some self-editing of our work before we publish it.

You have the talent, no doubt. But if you really are serious (and i believe you are) about writing, i hope you'll consider this as an area for improvement.

Over all, this is worth the read again.
Keep on writing and i'll be reading whenever i can:-)

Sat, May 11th, 2013 9:49am

Author
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Thanks :) ANd this is an earlier poem, I know I need to correct stuff but thanks.

Sat, May 11th, 2013 4:23pm

ashe999

I cant describe how sad this one made me... This is good for you cause your ''wake up'' intense feelings from your audience! But bad for me cause i tried to ''erase her face from my heart'' and after reading this, you brought it back!
Anyhow, I loved it!!!

Fri, January 12th, 2018 9:49am

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