Meager Change

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Did I just use pancakes as a metaphor? You bet I did ;)
*Thanks to arun for correcting my sloppy spelling :) Always appreciated.

Consistency is viscous,
It gets you somewhere slow,
It takes you nowhere fast,
And you hover unstable, undecided,
For hours.

Every agonizing detail is,
Scorched beyond recognition,
Branded on your heart,
Or was that my mind?
I wonder.

Take your time,
But don't take mine.
Leisure is attended by the rich,
We attend church,
Hand out meager change.

Detail isn't acquired by hours
It's simply skill that's borrowed.
On borrowed time you
Poured emotions slowly
On a dish gone cold.

Not the sweetness of your syrup,
The begging of your heart,
Nor beating of your fists
Can send these knees crashing.
Remember?

I am not rich with leisure,
I toss meager change for faith
Cast petty thoughts aside
These knees will never beg,
They simply pray.


Submitted: January 27, 2011

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the dead poet

you might not be rich with leisure but your always rich with words, even if they are spoke with dismay, they still have a have a way of being sweet as syrup, or as i like to say sweet like swarberry wine, smooth like tennesse whiskey warm as a glass of brandy, david allen coe, lol well i like that song lol well very nice write hope to see you post more stuff,on hear, and i will read!

Sun, February 27th, 2011 10:00pm

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Lol thanks for the comment! I haven't been on here in forever but comments like that make me want to write again :D

Sun, April 3rd, 2011 7:55am

arun

Consistency and recognition were misspelt. Other than that I like this. Yeah, but leisure is not always for the rich...
Kmu. Your friend, Arun...:)

Fri, June 24th, 2011 10:08pm

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Gah, I'm a stickler for grammar, but not a good speller. I'll fix those right away, thanks so much for the corrections, AND for reading and commenting! You are just making my day :D

Fri, June 24th, 2011 7:03pm

animilia

This is very....... oh what should I say? It really is very amazing/ unique. keep writing!

Sat, July 2nd, 2011 6:01pm

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Thanks so much for reading & taking the time to comment! This is one of my more abstract pieces.

Sun, July 3rd, 2011 6:29pm

ToniTaylor

i love love love this. i could never express it any better, i don't think that anyone else could, though!
I just love your work so incredibly much.
x

Mon, July 4th, 2011 4:22am

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Oh gosh thanks so much for such an encouraging comment. I'm glad you enjoy it! :)

Tue, July 19th, 2011 8:21pm

Zin Dar

Haha! I see what you did with the syrup ^^

I'll be honest though, I didn't see the pancake in this :-P (The pancake in this lol, epic)
That will probably be my new catchphrase :-P "I didn't see the pancake in this".


Anyway.... Nicely written poem ^^

Thu, August 4th, 2011 7:46pm

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Lolol your job should be thinking these things up. Hm, I suppose the dish was pancakes when I wrote this so long ago. I do love pancakes. :) Thanks again for reading and commenting! :D

Thu, August 4th, 2011 12:52pm

brucek

well, i certainly know a little more about you now. but i won't waste your time with a lengthy comment. i liked it. (and i think you broke the record for the longest syrup metaphor. your award is in the mail)

Sun, August 7th, 2011 8:36am

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Lol ;) excellent :) And my time is never wasted on comments, feel free to ramble on for days any time you feel it. Thank you again for reading and commenting! :D

Sun, August 7th, 2011 8:07am

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