Without You

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic

love-ish poem =]

In a world full of hatred and death
Surrounded by wrongs and indiscretions
You protect me
The hells from below rising
Influences of evil and wrath
You shield me
Taking in my surroundings
Seeing that I have not been taught
You teach me
I remember all of the bad that has happened
The pain I have suffered, the ache in my heart
You help me see happiness
The scars on my arms showing
New wounds and blood dripping
You heal me
All of the wrongs I have done
The pain I have caused and stitches on your heart
You forgave me
I pushed you away
Trampled over the words of our future
You still loved me
I see what I am doing… I know it’s wrong
When all is said and done
Will you leave me?

Submitted: January 26, 2010

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This seems to me this young woman or girl is trying to ask for forgiveness and is wondering if the man or boy will accept. At least that is how I see it. Jessica :D

Thu, January 28th, 2010 3:41pm



Thu, January 28th, 2010 9:48am

Euphoria Applegate

Wow! This was really good! The parralelism was just Ahhhhmazing! Those parts especially spoke to me. They seriously make the poem, which was probably the intent! And also, that last line, the way it's contrary to the lines and the message that precedes it, make this even better. You did a really good job!!!

Sat, January 30th, 2010 9:02pm


thank you!! you just gave me a huge cheese smile! =D

Sat, January 30th, 2010 1:09pm

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