INTO THE WORLD I COME
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Poem by: acedawg
Its darkness all around
A heartbeat is the only sound
I’m scared of what lies ahead
I scream to avoid my dread
Up ahead I see a light
I try to avoid it with all my might
Though I try, I continue to fail
Something is pulling me, I am compelled
Something grabs me by my head
I can feel my anger I’m getting mad
I leave the comfort of this place
But I can rest easy, I see my mother’s face
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seriously, that's a nice poem can't even begin to cover how amazing that was. It was fun to read and it even rhymed, not many poems rhyme nowadays so it was way more than a nice frakin poem, it was pure genius!
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lol thank you much. If you get a chance read my Kalador novel. That's my best writing to date as novels go, nowhere near finished though.
Cool,
heres my version:
I see up ahead the flesh doors
that open to the shiny floors
But soon they will be stained with blood
from the placenta that will come out, cuz
Man, here I come unto this earth
from a strange weird and smelly birth
My mother is shouting as I come out
wonder what that shits all about?
I see a face,ugly as hell
He wipes my mommas ass, as it does smell
Whatya think???
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crazy ass
Love it!!!!!!! Great job.
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thank you
this was sooo good. I actually imagined it!
please read my new novel Why does he love me..?
It would be great if you could!
x
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will do and thanks
Wow great work. You know this reminded me of being in the room when my son was born. He is adopted. When he came out he was so upset. I was thinking then poor baby. I wished we could really get a glimpse of what babies think when they are being born. Very well written.
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thank you
Thats a really good interpretation! well done :D
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thank you. read my Kalador novel I've started when you can, my best work i believe. plus, the everyday life is kinda cool
That's a fine and also cute way of telling this everyday drama
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thank you. read kalador when you can
i loved it and it was great how it rhymed and if you have time vould you read my poem called a couples love????
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sure will, when you can read my Kalador work
Thank you for adding rhyme to a reason, especially to the perspective of a baby, well done.
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thanks read my other works when you can.
Very interesting i liked how it was shown from the babies point of view
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thanks again
interesting creative expression. very nice imagery :)
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thank you. read my every day life series. not very descriptive, but I am writing it for fun. My main work is the Kalador novel.
beyond nice your really talnted
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thank you very much
Please you have to finish his piece, its lovely and wow.. i cld imagine it. I'm going to take it to FaceB/.
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thank you
I think this was so neat. Loved the way you built it.
A gem.
Susan
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thanks ill read some of yours later, 2. i stay pretty busy writing and working.
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