INTO THE WORLD I COME

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

babies first experience at life

Its darkness all around

A heartbeat is the only sound

I’m scared of what lies ahead

I scream to avoid my dread

Up ahead I see a light

I try to avoid it with all my might

Though I try, I continue to fail

Something is pulling me, I am compelled

Something grabs me by my head

I can feel my anger I’m getting mad

I leave the comfort of this place

But I can rest easy, I see my mother’s face


Submitted: September 03, 2009

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TheManWithManyWalls

seriously, that's a nice poem can't even begin to cover how amazing that was. It was fun to read and it even rhymed, not many poems rhyme nowadays so it was way more than a nice frakin poem, it was pure genius!

Thu, September 3rd, 2009 5:33pm

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lol thank you much. If you get a chance read my Kalador novel. That's my best writing to date as novels go, nowhere near finished though.

Thu, September 3rd, 2009 10:36am

Alex Key

Cool,
heres my version:

I see up ahead the flesh doors
that open to the shiny floors
But soon they will be stained with blood
from the placenta that will come out, cuz
Man, here I come unto this earth
from a strange weird and smelly birth
My mother is shouting as I come out
wonder what that shits all about?
I see a face,ugly as hell
He wipes my mommas ass, as it does smell

Whatya think???

Thu, September 3rd, 2009 11:20pm

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crazy ass

Thu, September 3rd, 2009 6:21pm

lifehater13

Love it!!!!!!! Great job.

Fri, September 4th, 2009 2:09am

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thank you

Fri, September 4th, 2009 5:26am

babiigirlxx

this was sooo good. I actually imagined it!
please read my new novel Why does he love me..?
It would be great if you could!
x

Fri, September 4th, 2009 10:55am

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will do and thanks

Fri, September 4th, 2009 5:27am

Anastasia Starlena

Wow great work. You know this reminded me of being in the room when my son was born. He is adopted. When he came out he was so upset. I was thinking then poor baby. I wished we could really get a glimpse of what babies think when they are being born. Very well written.

Fri, September 4th, 2009 10:08pm

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thank you

Fri, September 4th, 2009 5:10pm

Lucy J

Thats a really good interpretation! well done :D

Sat, September 5th, 2009 2:11pm

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thank you. read my Kalador novel I've started when you can, my best work i believe. plus, the everyday life is kinda cool

Sat, September 5th, 2009 7:22am

Else Cederborg

That's a fine and also cute way of telling this everyday drama

Sat, September 5th, 2009 6:11pm

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thank you. read kalador when you can

Sat, September 5th, 2009 11:22am

foreverkeena101

i loved it and it was great how it rhymed and if you have time vould you read my poem called a couples love????

Sat, September 5th, 2009 6:59pm

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sure will, when you can read my Kalador work

Sun, September 6th, 2009 6:59am

SierraFaye

Thank you for adding rhyme to a reason, especially to the perspective of a baby, well done.

Mon, September 7th, 2009 3:52pm

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thanks read my other works when you can.

Mon, September 7th, 2009 9:04am

tastetheblood

Very interesting i liked how it was shown from the babies point of view

Wed, September 9th, 2009 4:21am

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thanks again

Wed, September 9th, 2009 4:40am

justbeformlessly

interesting creative expression. very nice imagery :)

Thu, September 10th, 2009 6:22pm

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thank you. read my every day life series. not very descriptive, but I am writing it for fun. My main work is the Kalador novel.

Thu, September 10th, 2009 11:33am

bloppieblipp

beyond nice your really talnted

Thu, September 10th, 2009 11:19pm

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thank you very much

Thu, September 10th, 2009 4:21pm

Sovereign

Please you have to finish his piece, its lovely and wow.. i cld imagine it. I'm going to take it to FaceB/.

Tue, September 22nd, 2009 5:27pm

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thank you

Tue, September 22nd, 2009 10:59am

Mistress of Word Play

I think this was so neat. Loved the way you built it.
A gem.
Susan

Sat, October 3rd, 2009 8:39pm

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thanks ill read some of yours later, 2. i stay pretty busy writing and working.

Sun, October 4th, 2009 6:35am

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