My Number Game

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Me just having fun

1 pop, 2 pop, 3 pop, 4
You pop, I pop, We pop, more
1 dog and 2 cats
1 mother and 2 brats
2 fishes and 1 ocean
2 witches and 1 potion
1 gun and multiple bangs
1 world and multiple gangs
$5 k spent but one item bought
1 human mind but so many thoughts
1 mill births for every 1 mill lifes pawned
Very far from now, You drop, I drop, We drop, gone!!

Submitted: January 23, 2012

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EmmaElizabethHall

Very nice! I really enjoyed reading it, you have a way with words, I admire how you covered so many subjects by rhyming.
Splendid job!
Emma.

Mon, January 23rd, 2012 3:07pm

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Well thank you very much Emma! Im glad you enjoyed it. If you would like,visit my page often and i will have more of my poems up for you to read.

Mon, January 23rd, 2012 11:40am

5Forever23His10Fan

This is an amazing poem :) I think it is is so clever. I really do like the last line; how it talks about death, but it is somewhat hidden. Also I like how that line is referring to a distant death. It puts a little light on an inevidble situation. I love it :)

Tue, January 24th, 2012 7:44pm

Takara

i like how you describe ^_^ i keep getting more hooked in your poetry.

Fri, February 3rd, 2012 11:06pm

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I'm glad :)

Fri, February 3rd, 2012 3:35pm

K Booke

This is really well written! The way you 'perked' up the whole topic of death was definitely original and highly intriguing! I also liked how you slowly progressed into the fact that we're all gonna die without going off-topic. Well done! Loved it!

Sat, February 4th, 2012 3:40am

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Well thank you very much! I'm so glad you loved it. Means a whole lot to me.

Fri, February 3rd, 2012 8:08pm