Like a Snowflake

That was really a beautifully written story. Reminds me of when I used to be suicidal and whenever I just showed a little inch of my unhappiness everyone would isolate me. They wouldn't want to talk to the crazy freak that always wants the "attention." Though I found a true friend who helped me to get help and I'm much happier now.

Anyway not to get off topic, I really I like the whole story and it's realistic too.

OMG... this is so powerful....
i swear i felt like it was all happening to me
the way you describe the whole situation, comparing life to snowflakes... Wow
just wow...
loved it
sad
but loved it

Ok, sorry it took me so long to comment but I was lookiing for a word to describe this, but unfortunatley it would take wayy too long and I'm sure you'd want your comment in THIS century. This is undescribable and beautiful! I love it! :O)?

First off I really liked it. You probably get the idea by now I'll always have something to add beyond that though. :)

The last five lines are stunning. Never loose that style and the last ryme is . . well, it's poetry.

I notice that the last several stanza's end in the word see. I assume that's intentional and it might be interesting to see if you can do it in the first section as well. It would be a nice connective feature. In my opinion that is.

Very awesome, just the way it is though.

Very nice. You can really hear the emotion in your words. Amazing Job!

That was amazing. Well written, emotional, powerful, everything most people look for in a story. You better not stop writing because you're really good!

The last sentence is just amazing. "Like a snowflake, I fall free." It just an absolutely fantastic way to end such an awesome story! I love it, and I gave it a like! Keep it up!

"I paste a fake smile on my face and act. The smile never reaches my eyes, they do not notice, they do not see."
i relate to this line a lot.
holy fucking shit.. i love this. i mean, suicide is a permanent solution to a temporary problem, as im sure youve heard before. but wow, you wrote this really nicely. and that the last few paragraphs when you ended it withL they do not notice they do not see. i really felt it.
and at the very very end, i felt like i was this charcater, and i felt cold and helpless and truly just a lie living on earth to meet other peoples stupid needs when they never noticed me or my feelings.. and then right when i read: They do not notice, they do not see.Like a snowflake, I fall free" i imagined my self falling and blending in with the rest of the snow at the bottom and then STILL no one seeing, not one caring..woowww, thank you for writing this. its been one of my favorites on here

Very deep. Emotional and revealing the belly of a beast that we all feel clawing at our insides from time to time. How odd it is that in the moments of isolation such as you describe, make us, in reality, more like those around us who go through similar circumstances.

We all wear masks, some of us are just better at hiding our true face, some of us don't know how to take it off and show our inner selves without fear. And even still some never take it off. How sad for those people. To know ones true self, is to become stronger and confident when we do let those we care for the most see behind the mask.

In this story I see despair, but I also see hope. Hope that those who read this learn to take off their masks, because the light is so much brighter without it.

Great job!

This is awesome, in narrative and in style!
Love it ;D

Wow. Quite a gripping story.
I wish I knew more about the person though ): It went by a little fast and I didn't really have a chance to grip and relate as i would if there was more detail, but being insides this strangers head was really interesting.

Ah. this issue grips with so many kids its almost not even a funny number. I wish she hadn't jumped, but then again imagine all the kids who did.

orange box !!! :) sooooo amazing, you know who i am > orange box !!!!! xxxx

This like the greatest snow story.there is a song that makes perfect connection to this story.(Thir eye blind jumper)

This was very well put. I could actually visualize this. I give you five stars.

this is really beautiful i can really imagine the pain they are going through your descriptions are brilliant keep it up xx

I loved.... loved this story. I could feel every bit of anger, depression, sadness. Gives me chills :)

Loved it! You've captured the esscence of someone who is lost inside themselves, yearning to be free of the confines of what society says is "acceptable". Keep up the good work! If you get a chance, check out my poem Last Thoughts of a Lonely Kid. I think you'll like it very much.

Very powerful!

That was very well written and it truly reflects some of my own feelings. That was excellent work mate. Keep writing, you can accomplish much in this field.

truthfully insightful. realistic and thoughtful. i as others liked your metaphors. you have a talent for putting everyone's thoughts in a matter that others would understand. thanks for asking me to read your work. i wouldn't regret it.