A contrived piece for English.

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A desperate effort to, quoth my teacher, "crank out" a poem was utterly fruitless. I therefore decided to write a sort of abstract poem about the thought process. On second thought, I'll keep it simple: it's a ramble, pure and simple. Enjoy and as always, reviews are welcome and appreciated! :)

Produce, concoct, conjure up

Create, devise, conceive, think

Accept.
Deny.

Fleeting, taste of marzipan

Ubiquitous like a shadow

Could be.
Would be.

Thunder striking on the train

Or drowning the grey matter

Buzzing.
Swimming

Tangible, sand between toes

Abstract as a silver cloud

Feeling.
Thinking.

Electric stream of consciousness

Brilliant,
Convoluted,
Grotesque,
Idea.


Submitted: July 25, 2009

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IanJohnson

very nice! i like the flow, rather unorthodox. feel free to stop in and comment on one of my stories, and i will check in on another of your poems!

Sat, July 25th, 2009 9:36pm

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thanks very much, i'll be sure to do so!

Sat, July 25th, 2009 4:05pm

hhhh

That was nice, once again hard to know how to put it, you are very complex, unlike me and that's why it's so hard to know what you mean when I read this. Please, explain it to me, I am very bad at reading, honestly, I have very stupid!

Sun, July 26th, 2009 6:00pm

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Thank you, I'm so flattered! In this poem, I was just describing the different ways one can get an idea, and the different sorts of ideas one can get. =D

Sun, July 26th, 2009 11:40am

WhatIsInAName

Haha. Wonderful!
Sums up very well the difficulties of coming up with a good idea.
The "Wait... I have something.... ah no that wouldn't work"

Haha loved it! =) x

Tue, August 4th, 2009 2:39pm

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I always find that to be the most frustrating feeling...and I'm glad I managed to convey it! :D Thanks for the comments, as always! :)

Tue, August 4th, 2009 9:34am

Don George

These kinds of poems are great (to me) like a poets poem. Self affirming or rather showing itself by example; know what I mean?

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 1:09pm

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the show not tell principle? yes, I am familiar. It's the mantra I continually, sortof subconsciously, tell myself when I spit out what words turn into "poetry".
thank you for your comments, they're lovely and constructive. :)

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 8:25pm

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