Poem by: Aerolin
death, childhood, lonely, sad, heart, eyes, fire, hurt, die, rock, rhyme, drums, brain, cry, beat, ember, abusive, shutting
Submitted: June 02, 2010
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awesome poem, think you would like soma my cussn work write more
haha thanks :)
What I got from this, is that the person is locked while fire burns around them...am I close?
I didnt really understand the "icy rock" - How does it fit in?
The first 2 lines are great but I think saying "beats to" not "with", would be better. Lastly, did you mean to say "raged" (angry) or "ragged" (old/torn) dolls?
to poem could be taken several ways but i think that that's like more of the obvious explanation but not that what i was intending, it was about the trapped feeling of child abuse, and the fire symbolized the anger and confusion that went along with it. the icy rock symbolized kinda hitting rock bottom, how empty and cold it feels. and i said beats with the sound b/c it was against the will kinda of thing. oh and yeah haha i did mean to say ragged! thank you for everything too :D
I appreciate you replying and explaining yourself :)
anytime, it was a pleasure :D
You have really good flow here.
thank you :)
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