The Silver Bracelet

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Horror  |  House: Booksie Classic

It is a horror story. Something that you haven't read or heard before.


The Silver Bracelet.

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I just walked down the street, feeling alone as the cool breeze messed with my brown hair. The darkness was covering my path and surroundings around me. I was moving towards my house when I heard a voice behind me.

“Alicia, wait,” called my friend Mike.

“I don’t wanna talk about it Mike,” I said angrily looking into his brown eyes.

“You just can’t run away from it.” I know he didn’t mean it literally but what I did was totally childish.

“Well, watch me,” I said and ran towards my house. I closed the door and locked it.

I don’t wanna remember anything from that night. I would not say a word to anyone. I went in my room and sat there alone, thinking about that night. I could picture it perfectly. I went to the haunted house in our city Gorandill with my friend Mike on the eve of Halloween. Mike was checking out the outer area but I went inside. I was there in that big hall whose walls were covered in blood and that lifeless body of a young girl lay on the floor. Her face was ruined but there was no one else in the hall that could have done it. At least, that’s what I thought until I saw the spirit of a man flying in the air. I was scared so I ran.

“Don’t run pretty girl,” he said in a mocking tone. I didn’t stop until I bumped into Mike.

“Mike run,” I screamed at him dragging him along with me.

“What happened?” he asked.

“Ghost,” I said while running.

“That’s shit,” he said because he doesn’t believe in ghosts. But he was still running along with me.

When I reached the outer area, I stopped, just to catch my breath. I guess the ghost wasn’t following us anymore but I didn’t look back to prove it. As soon as I was out of that place, I stopped to look at Mike and tell him what I saw. He didn’t believe me and then suddenly the ghost appeared from behind him.

“No, Mike,” I said. I saw the spirit entering his body.

“You can’t run away from me, pretty girl,” said Mike but I recognized the voice and it was of that ghost. I couldn’t run away because he was standing in my path to the outer gate. I started chanting prayers to god and then remembered that I was wearing my silver bracelet, which my Grandma had given me. I had read in a novel that silver hurts the bad spirits. I don’t if it would work but I had to do something. So I took it out and threw it on Mike.

His eyes were like on fire, he screamed in pain. I just stood there, chanting prayers when I saw smoke coming out of Mike’s body. It looked like some shadow emerging out of his skin as I kept saying the name of God. Mike fell to the ground. I was scared to go near him, so instead I took out a sticky note from my purse and wrote on it,

Mike, I am going home. It’d be better if you get out of this place as soon as you can and keep my silver bracelet with you. Hope to see you soon.

Alicia

I kept the sticky note on the ground and my bracelet with it. I looked back at that place for the final time and swore that I would never come back to this place in my life. I was getting back home when I heard Mike’s voice from behind.

“What just happened?” he asked.

“Nothing,” I replied in a calm tone.

From that day, Mike has been asking me the same question every time I come in front of him. But I can’t tell him anything. I don’t even know myself what had happened there but one thing has changed now. I always wear my silver bracelet now, which Mike returned me.

 



Submitted: October 29, 2013

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Jonathan DeLacuso

This story was pretty good and here are my grades
1. The storyline was pretty good although there wasn't much build up to it ( plus you get extra points for writing in the spirit pf Halloween ). So you get an 8.5/10 in that department.
2. The fear factor was great ( I especially enjoyed when the ghost appeared right behind Mike) so you get a 9/10 there
3. The villain was awesome ( although I kinda wish I knew more about him) He was fearsome and bloodthirsty ( a true villainous virtue) so I am going to give you a 9/ 10 for him also.
Overall this was an amazing story and I am sure you would have made it a bit longer if there wad more time but what you did in such short notice was incredible. Congratulation

Tue, October 29th, 2013 12:57pm

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Thank you so so much. I'm glad that you like it ~Alex- the shadow girl

Wed, October 30th, 2013 2:34am

smircle

Your descriptions are good and your plot progressed well, though I felt it was a little rushed. I'd have like to have known a bit more about the characters, though for such a short piece, I got a grasp of them well enough. The gory details were well described, so good job :)

Fri, November 29th, 2013 9:21pm

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Thank you.

Sat, November 30th, 2013 1:59am

Tripti Saraogi

the story line was pretty good, but it was a little rushed. i wanted to knw more details of the scary day.... but it was a nice read. good job :)

Fri, December 13th, 2013 7:29am

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thank you..... :)

Sat, December 14th, 2013 2:42am

Felix Fossi

Nice premise but it presents more questions than answers. First, if Mike doesn't believe in ghosts then why is he so interested in checking out a haunted house on Halloween? Why didn't she contact the police if she saw the apparent body of a dead girl? And her friend was smoking as the ghost escaped and she was so frightened, yet she happened to have sticky note and actually took the time to write a casual note, but not try to wake up Mike and help him get out of there as well? Also I know she was freaked out but why so uptight in telling Mike what happened? I did like the silver bracelet legend and how she used it to get rid of the ghost, but too many unanswered questions leading up to that.

Wed, January 29th, 2014 5:58am

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That's the thing about a horror story. It keeps tthe mind of the reader wander to diffrent possibilities. And that's what makes it so interesting. (Atleast that's what I think) :)

Wed, January 29th, 2014 2:03am

akirachan20

That's great horror story, brief and simple with good imagery

Sat, March 22nd, 2014 10:43am

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Thanx

Sat, March 22nd, 2014 7:27am

mhamzasiddiqui

Hi Alex- I really like this story, but to be honest, you need to work on your imagery; you would have made it more horror by elaborating the feelings and emotions of Alicia. The story seemed to be pacey though, but it was okay for reading. Whenever a reader wants to read a horror story, he/she actually expects to read thrillers. I hope it won't make you offensive, but if you work on it, your horror stories will be the best! Will read your other work too. Mhamzasiddiqui

Wed, April 16th, 2014 5:49am

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Thanx for reading this one. Though it's one of my old write-ups and trust me I have tried to improve myself. If you read some of my other works, i'm sure you'll like them :)

Wed, April 16th, 2014 2:34am

Spyguy

I thought you did really well on this... Like from me...

Mon, May 12th, 2014 7:29pm

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Thanx

Sun, May 18th, 2014 6:48pm

ag2girl

I don't usually read horror stories, but this is a good story and isn't too scary for me. I like it.

Thu, June 5th, 2014 8:24pm

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Thanks so much :)

Fri, June 6th, 2014 2:56am

ImmortalMarcos

If only this were a novel! Ahh! This was awesome. Period. The characters and the scene and the setting, IT WAS JUST PERFECTION! You could so branch out and create something memorable with this. Great job! (:

Tue, July 29th, 2014 7:11pm

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Aww thank you so much :)

Wed, July 30th, 2014 2:34am

Shashank Shrivastava

Nice story. Plot was good, but try describing the surrounding more.

Sun, January 3rd, 2016 1:18pm

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I'll keep that in mind.

Mon, March 21st, 2016 10:18am

Amy R. Beckett

Great short story. The concept is good, although I feel it is over with quite quickly which might detract from the overall creepiness of it...

There were a couple of places where I think that a more in depth description might help to build the tension a little more - for example when Alicia sees the girl's body and the ghost for the first time, and then when she's telling Mike what she saw perhaps you could actually describe what she's saying rather than just informing us that it did happen?

On the whole, though, very well written. Good job :)

Wed, June 1st, 2016 6:52am

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