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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Moments in life during deployement. South West Asia. Just before the dreaded moment. I, they, escaped it. This time.

Behind shadows I wait for them to appear

Tunnel vision, I'm trapped in fear

Something far away moves ahead

If I do it right he'll be dead

In the crosshairs is the silhouette

As I start to sweat

Oh Lord I I don't want to take what I can't give back

I try to reason, soon us they will attack

Suddenly they stop, fish in a barrel

Mind and heart in me now quarrel

Orders and conciense fight

Lord Lord this can't be right

From my radio's flea I hear a familiar voice

Stop, stop my dear and rejoice

Truce is on, a sweetcall

Tears of joy on my cheecks roll

How long it will last

How long till next bomb blast

Lord come and make peace an eternity

We have done enough cruelty

Submitted: February 07, 2009

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Most suspenseful and dramatically well written. Gave it an "I Like It" vote. Terrific writing.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Sun, February 8th, 2009 3:53am


Ooops, should have gone in here...

Thu, February 12th, 2009 9:16pm


Kindly thank you sir. I suspect your opinion is heartfelt.


Sun, February 8th, 2009 2:54pm

Dejected But Symmetrical

This was really good, greet read


Wed, February 18th, 2009 4:23am


Thanks Skye. I am glad you liked it but please feel free to comment in anyway you care. I have more, some from way back then, can't believe I wrote those then... I'll post them eventually.


Wed, February 18th, 2009 10:44am

Imperfect Perfection

I like this written really well, plus great rhyming.


Sun, April 5th, 2009 4:42am


Thank you kindly Miss Pefect Imperfection.


Sat, April 11th, 2009 6:08pm


Engaging story + skillful rhyming = great poem! I especially like these lines: Mind and heart in me now quarrel/Orders and conciense fight/Lord Lord this can't be right...and the last two lines. I think you've really captured the inner conflict that I'm sure most soldiers have to deal with...and also the hope for the future.

Fri, May 29th, 2009 4:16pm


Not a easy thing to deal with. Few days ago i had to finish off a dear mangled by a vehicle... Imagine this with humane beings. Thanks for the thoughtfull comment.

Fri, May 29th, 2009 6:16pm

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